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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #30 on: January 14, 2009, 05:03:30 PM »
very good Syra
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #31 on: January 14, 2009, 10:28:13 PM »
More great additions to your story hun. It's a very good read, I kinda enjoy the childish innocense of it thus far. Shame we all know the depressing parts are to come
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #32 on: January 15, 2009, 06:49:28 PM »
Okay, for those reading this, I have updated another two badly written paragraphs =P
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #33 on: January 15, 2009, 08:11:17 PM »
(Badly written? You really should be more proud of your work :P )
Nice two chapters. Whilst the pair of children are just going through their normal routines, the innocence, energy and cuteness of youth is clearly shown in this rather warm scene.
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #34 on: January 15, 2009, 11:28:30 PM »
Really adorable. And I highly doubt it is badly written, Sy.
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #35 on: January 20, 2009, 08:56:52 PM »
Two more paragraphs added
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #36 on: January 21, 2009, 07:08:57 AM »
Awwwwww, that's adorable  :-[
Very nice addition Syra, it cheered me up.
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #37 on: January 25, 2009, 10:27:30 PM »
Im Moving House = More the 2 paragraphs update when i return =P
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #38 on: January 25, 2009, 11:39:25 PM »
Hm, pretty good so far... I just can't but get the foreboding feeling that something's gonna happen though ^^;

And I'll be waiting to read those paragraphs!
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #39 on: February 03, 2009, 08:40:54 AM »
Woot!
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I Have 5 paragraphs to add
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #40 on: February 12, 2009, 05:17:28 PM »
and here we go.
As promised. the next 5 paragraphs are up.
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #41 on: February 12, 2009, 05:25:58 PM »
*Tries hardest not to cry and fails* That was so grim and depressing...poor Syra...the sweetness and innocence of the story so far only makes this addition all the more heartbreaking...truly brilliant job...:sniffle:
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #42 on: February 12, 2009, 10:44:37 PM »
Hm, that was a good read! You give enough foreshadowing to keep us wondering, but not so much that we know everything ^^
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Re: Syra's Past
« Reply #43 on: February 13, 2009, 04:40:06 AM »
Very nice love, you have done a excellent job of developing your sona's story. Its a very good and interesting read
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