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A glimpse of my novel
« on: October 14, 2008, 12:45:09 AM »
It will be up tomorrow or the next day so keep an eye out.
My dear there is no danger
Can't you see they turn blind eyes
To we swift and spotlight strangers?
Oh before the rush is over
We will be revered again
While the victims still recover
Oh,
Are we running toward death?
I have met him times before
He adores us like the rest
Oh even if we're discovered
Just be sure to wear your best
We will surely make the covers


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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #1 on: October 15, 2008, 12:59:40 AM »
((Here it is)) ((Just a preview remember!))

Two for One

   She knew who she was, she always did. She was one of the legends the greats but now she was unsure. After all the things that had happened Isabella knew that she was anything but legendary or great. She had lost on the one field that mattered to her, the battlefield. Feeling the bloody froth find her lips she knew that the end was near enough. With the spear of her end protruding from her chest there was not much else she could do with her last moments than think.
   One thing she had never understood was what made her so special why such a big deal over her life? Or any of the other thirty chosen for their so called abilities. This was getting her more and more frustrated she mouthed the word “why?” then cringed at the creeping death slowly straining into her body weakness completely overtaking her this would be her last few minuets on this cruel earth. With a very weak smirk she remembered the day she had met Ryu the man who had given her a second chance. Her family had been gypsies and were notorious for stealing and just about any other crime that came with it.
   She had never been caught herself but her parents were caught several years ago now and were sentenced to death for their crimes. After that she became a bigger thief and that was her fatal mistake or was it blessing? She no longer knew all she knew was that it led to her being thrown before Ryu, the king of the chosen. There she was given a choice her left hand or to serve under Ryu as a chosen. She never knew why until she discovered as she aged that she had more battle skills, healing talents and speed than most of the other children. But then again that was only her talent wasn’t it? The other children had their own talents some magic some physical even some with the power of their life itself but this was the end. As tears filled her eyes she knew that this was it goodbye life hello hell. As her eyes fluttered closed the life left her and her tears streamed onto the battered and bloodied battlefield and that was it her life was gone.
My dear there is no danger
Can't you see they turn blind eyes
To we swift and spotlight strangers?
Oh before the rush is over
We will be revered again
While the victims still recover
Oh,
Are we running toward death?
I have met him times before
He adores us like the rest
Oh even if we're discovered
Just be sure to wear your best
We will surely make the covers


I am a Hermaphrodite and proud of it!

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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #2 on: October 15, 2008, 11:26:32 AM »
Very good, it leaves me hungry for more. ;)
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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #3 on: October 15, 2008, 11:09:25 PM »
((1278 years into present day))

   Ã¢â‚¬Å“Cian” opened his eyes to the buzzing of his alarm clock and groaned rolling over and out of his head feeling the harsh and cold embrace of his hardwood floor. Standing up he cracked his neck and stepped out of his clothes grabbing his shower towel “Another day another bore” he said with a simple sigh of frustration he ruffled his short brown hair and laughed looking in the mirror at his now sticking up hair then paused to stair at his icy blue eyes which he knew were really not his own yet girl’s seemed to love them and he didn’t even know why.  Turning on the shower he knew that he was never himself to begin with but simply a host. From what his “True” inhabitant had told him the real person within him was named Isabella and had been here after her own death way back when. The two could common through their thoughts but that was it. From what he understood Isabella had to seek out and destroy the other twenty nine chosen not to mention Ryu, if she wished to reclaim her body and start anew this sadly meant that Thomas would be no more but a lost soul headed for a second life elsewhere.
   Stepping into the water he jumped slightly at the heat and closed his eyes letting the water soak over the kinks in his body from sleeping for so long. He had skipped the day at school the previous day just so he could sleep and all it resulted in was bed sores. He let his thoughts connect with the mind of Isabella “Hey Isabella?” he asked waiting for a response. A feminine voice echoed in the back of his mind “Yes what is it Cian?” he paused even when thinking which was completely odd. Soon after he responded “If you need to kill these chosen... Should you not have done it by now?” he asked technically himself. A small laugh was heard in his mind making him shudder for some reason “No not as of yet but since you have reached the age that you have got some physical capability I suppose we could “she answered almost in a superior tone making Cian feel a little put down.
   

He finished his shower in silence not wishing to commune with Bella any more. Toweling off he slipped into his undergarments and his pants, as he was finishing buttoning up the top of his pants the phone rang causing him to dash and trip on the baggy bottoms of his pants. He crawled on the floor with a groan and picked up the phone. With a strained voice he replied “Ello?” he asked getting up and shaking off the impact of the fall. It was his father on the other end “Cian? You ready for school or what?” Cian grumbled, his father did this ever damn day and it was getting on his last nerve “Yes father of course I am” he said slamming it down on the receiver “Arrogant...” he cut himself off sliding down the banister of the stairs and landing on the middle floor just before the front door.

Picking up a granola bar he set it between his teeth as he put on his shoes, picked up his binder and locked the door. Then he was off awaiting the bus to get to his stop and take him off to boredom. After ten minuets of waiting his “carriage” was here to bring him to school. Flipping on his music and blaring “Phyocosocial” all he could think about was, “What if one of my friends has a spirit of a chosen?” he cringed at the thought it meant he would have to kill one of his closest friends and for a what ? A pain in the rear spirit that had been with him at birth? He shook off the thought as they arrived at school. Reading the letters above him that spelt Sir John A. He sighed and pressed inside and up to the upper lobby where several of his friends awaited him.
 (Page two)
My dear there is no danger
Can't you see they turn blind eyes
To we swift and spotlight strangers?
Oh before the rush is over
We will be revered again
While the victims still recover
Oh,
Are we running toward death?
I have met him times before
He adores us like the rest
Oh even if we're discovered
Just be sure to wear your best
We will surely make the covers


I am a Hermaphrodite and proud of it!

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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #4 on: October 15, 2008, 11:14:13 PM »
Very good, I like the normalcy hiding the odd. Nice effect.
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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #5 on: October 15, 2008, 11:15:44 PM »
I may put up the rest of what I have.
My dear there is no danger
Can't you see they turn blind eyes
To we swift and spotlight strangers?
Oh before the rush is over
We will be revered again
While the victims still recover
Oh,
Are we running toward death?
I have met him times before
He adores us like the rest
Oh even if we're discovered
Just be sure to wear your best
We will surely make the covers


I am a Hermaphrodite and proud of it!

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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #6 on: October 15, 2008, 11:33:58 PM »
Cool. I await your enchanting literature, grandson.
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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #7 on: October 15, 2008, 11:47:35 PM »
The first to greet him as always was one of his closest friends Alex. Just as he was approaching Alex Bella spoke up “There is our first target” she said in his head though he could not see her he knew that she must have been smirking. Cian paused midstep and focused his thoughts to Bella’s “Are you crazy!? That’s Alex he’s been my friend almost longer than you have been a pain in my backside” he simply though clearly enraged “Too bad Cian for when I wish to use this body I can and will and there is nothing that you can do about it so enjoy your last day with this “Boy” for it will be “his” last” Isabella was clearly hinting to Cian that Alex was really either a full grown man or maybe even a women deep within his spirit.
Alex’s eyes looked different from any other days they had the same determination in them as Bella’s voice meaning that sadly she was right and either him or Alex would be dead by the end of today. The reast of Cian’s day went fine the usual hanging out with Julie, James, Darren and Kal was perfectly fine but he stayed away from Alex until it was time to go home. The two stared at each other as they waited for the bus. As a voice whispered in Cian’s ear he looked completely confused these words were coming from Alex’s mouth but it was not his voice but one much deeper and more powerful. The words spoken were these “Humph... Finally I get to see you Beautiful... Or should I say Bella this ends today one of us will die the other will be one step closer to their second life.”
Cian felt drowsy as he lost consciousness but heard Bella speak back saying “Fine come to my human’s house and we will settle it there” she growled and almost instantly Cian gained control again “What the...” was all he could mutter as himself and Alex stumbled onto his bus and the wait was on. It was killing him deep down to be honest the stress of thinking how this was to happen and why almost made him cry. As the bus stopped at Cian’s house he slowly walked to his back yard where he dropped his things and Alex did the same.
Cian and Alex lost control once more and while there appearance was still there the true fighters were Bella and a man Cian still didn’t know the name of. Bella now spoke the first invoking words “So Hirate’ Still a big cry baby or are you going to fight for once” she said raising her hands in fists ready to fight. Hirate smiled through Alex’s lips and took a different stanched and replied “Hm? A big crybaby? From what I remember you were the one who always cried about your parents... Boo Hoo Mommy daddy stop burning! Stop Bleeding! No Mommy Daddy!” he mock cried clearly knowing that Bella would now be blinded by anger.
That much seemed to work as tears involuntarily rose to Cian’s eyes and Bella clenched his fists getting ready to strike. Taking a running step forward she cried out through Cian’s lips “Shut up! You Aragont jerk” she screamed his fist connecting with Alex’s a sharp crack was heard and he could feel the pain as he knew Alex would it seems that their body’s were more than just vessel’s for the two chosen but also weapons.
My dear there is no danger
Can't you see they turn blind eyes
To we swift and spotlight strangers?
Oh before the rush is over
We will be revered again
While the victims still recover
Oh,
Are we running toward death?
I have met him times before
He adores us like the rest
Oh even if we're discovered
Just be sure to wear your best
We will surely make the covers


I am a Hermaphrodite and proud of it!

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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #8 on: October 16, 2008, 12:13:48 AM »
Awesome. ;) I really like it, it's getting quite juicy. *wink*
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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #9 on: October 16, 2008, 12:22:14 AM »
Alex’s body tripped backwards as Hirate caught his balance for him spitting out blood and what looked like a tooth. Bella glared down at Cian’s knuckle which was currently split and bleeding but not like she cared or anything. Hirate laughed, Alex’s eyes seemed lifeless “Is that the best you can do Bella?” Hirate asked now making a dash himself aiming first a blow to “Cian’s” stomach he heard Bella scream and he screamed inside the pain burning through him it was more that he had ever felt. But that was nothing compared to what was coming next. The second blow from not Alex’s fist but his foot to Cian’s jaw hurt more than getting several teeth pulled at once. “Cian” now lay on his back breathing heavily tears of pain in the banks of his eyes. Hirate decided to mock again “Maybe you should just go back to searching for Mommy and Daddy in the after life since it seems your still just Daddy’s little girl even here” Hirate said laughing like a maniac.

“Cian” growled and got up in a shift motion and picked up a nearby peice of hardwood which was stowed underneath his deck and brought it in a connection to the currently laughing Alex’s face, after hearing a loud snap Bella knew that he was down for the count meaning that this was her chance to claim a peice of herself back. Looking around for something to use “Cian” found a shovel used for his father’s garden and lifted it over his head. He could not do a thing as the shovel came down in such a force that not only was Alex’s face broken enough to kill but his face was complexly crushed.
Regaining consciousness Cian now looked down to the bloody mess that was his friend or at least he had thought so. Holding Alex in his hands he could feel the warm tinge of his friends blood as it flowed over his hands. Cian instantly broke down in tears of fury and sorrow. He thought into his mind in an internal scream “Bella! What the hell!? I told you to leave him alone... Why Dammit!?” he cried slamming where Alex should have been but now all that remained as an odd glowing ball. To Cian’s surprise the thing spoke “Heh... Looks like you did have it in you Bella... You win” Apparently the orb was Hirate and Alex’s body was long gone all that remained was his blood which now stained the shovel and the grass.
The orb slammed into Cian rendering him unconscious. He awoke the next day to find that he was no longer a he and he was no longer in control. His body had changed into Bella’s it seems that this was the first stage of these chosen regaining their body’s.  Cian could now see her and well he could see what Hirate had called her beautiful. Simply put she was very beautiful but after what he had seen yesterday he knew she was deadly. Getting up Bella headed into his sister’s room, ((His sister had left month’s ago)) and picked up her make-up bag and made her way into the bathroom.    
Staring at the image in the bathroom Bella smiled seeing herself again for the first time in over a thousand years. Running a brush through her long black, crimson tipped hair she cringed working out the knots. Her complexion was pretty near perfect one of the perks to being one of the chosen. She added some black eye shadow and nail polish to her appearance, soon after she dug around into Cian’s drawer and found the panties and bra that she had forced him to buy a long while ago. Also she picked out a simple tee and wore an X-games sweater overtop. To top it all off she also drew out the pair of skinny Jeans that Cian’s girlfriend had given him some time ago and she was just about ready to go when...

((Theres the last of it ><"))
My dear there is no danger
Can't you see they turn blind eyes
To we swift and spotlight strangers?
Oh before the rush is over
We will be revered again
While the victims still recover
Oh,
Are we running toward death?
I have met him times before
He adores us like the rest
Oh even if we're discovered
Just be sure to wear your best
We will surely make the covers


I am a Hermaphrodite and proud of it!

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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #10 on: October 16, 2008, 12:35:13 AM »
I love it, I'd definitely buy and or steal it.
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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #11 on: October 16, 2008, 12:37:16 AM »
No where near done I left you with a cliff hanger on purpose only one of the other twenty nine are dead so bwa ha ha ha ha =D
My dear there is no danger
Can't you see they turn blind eyes
To we swift and spotlight strangers?
Oh before the rush is over
We will be revered again
While the victims still recover
Oh,
Are we running toward death?
I have met him times before
He adores us like the rest
Oh even if we're discovered
Just be sure to wear your best
We will surely make the covers


I am a Hermaphrodite and proud of it!

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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #12 on: October 16, 2008, 12:49:44 AM »
I will be awaiting.   :)
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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #13 on: October 16, 2008, 12:54:08 AM »
You should combine them and edit em into your original post that way everybody can read it without having to skim for them through the thread

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Re: A glimpse of my novel
« Reply #14 on: October 16, 2008, 09:33:31 PM »
It would be better, but, the only problem is the post will get to long and someone will shorten it, like they did to my siggy. *grumbles* I liked that sig...
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