Thanks. I wish more people than just you, rhakshi, and theridos would comment, though, I can use all the ctitique i can get! I want to improve!
Anyway, here's a poem i wrote the other night a little while after theridos logged off.
My lovely little lover,
How i pine for you when you are gone…
Longing that never ceases unless we are together.
But mark my words, i shall love you forever.
I need you so badly, my love
I cannot breathe when you’re not near,
When your voice i cannot hear.
You make me forget the world as i get lost in those lovely eyes of yours.
And my mind rests.
My love, don’t leave
Stay close and keep me warm,
Keep me safe from my mind, safe from all the monsters,
Safe from all my worries, safe from all my pain.
You take it all away, thrust into empty space.
Only you bring back my sanity, my love.
I simply need you more than i need air, my love.
When you’re not here i cry, i stay awake, and my mind is thrown to turmoil.
Dearly beloved, do you know how much i need you? could you ever come to understand?
For when we are together, i am thrust into such happiness,
Never have i known such bliss,
All i want to do is look into those eyes of yours,
Hold you close, kiss you with all the love i have, to be with you forever.
My lovely little lover,
How I need you so,
Just the sound of your voice brings back my sanity long lost
My love, come back, come back and dry my tears, we’ve been apart an hour, but to me
It seems like years.
This poem i wroteback in september. It's stillquite relavent.
Please don't say good-bye.
Two little tiny words
Pierce like daggers through the cloth.
A senseless smile without real meaning.
A bitten lip to keep from tears.
I miss you.
Right this very second; as the time to part draws near.
I already miss you.
I hate to be without you;
Seperation Anxiety.
Please just stay with me,
We can talk a while longer.
I know you have to leave soon.
So the tears well up.
And i try not to cry, to hold the salty water back.
But it's just too hard;
I'm no good at being strong.
Don't say good-bye.
The sadness wells up inside my body, waiting to explode.
A volcano of emotions, tensions rising, bottled up.
I hate to see us part.
I hate to be alone.
Don't leave me to my thoughts.
I want to be with you forever.
Sometimes i get so numb
I can barely even breath
My arm doesn't even feel the sting
Blood smeared all over tissues
Iron sweetness on my tounge.....
Why do i keep going?
And don't say it's ok,
When it's clearly not...
And don't say it'll be ok, unless you really mean it.
Just give me a hug,
And let me know that you're there.
Let me hold you close.
Just don't let go and stay with me...
I already miss you.
Don't say good-bye,
I hate it.
Two words that tear me up.
I just want to hold you close,
To listen to that beautiful heart of yours beat.
I want to look into your eyes,
To see all that troubles you,
And help you make things better.
Don't say good-bye.
Don't leave me alone.
Don't let me make myself bleed again.
I like to watch you draw
And do the things you do.
I like to hear your voice, to see you laugh and smile.
I want to make you happy, to see that all your dreams come true.
Don't tell me good-bye
Because there's nothing good about "bye".
I don't want to be alone,
I don't want to cry anymore.
Don't say good-bye.
Just stay.
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