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Title: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 06, 2013, 03:51:31 PM
Flowering Death


Death is like a wilting flower
 Pedals fall until the last Pedal of life has dropped
 Dying amongst the living as the flower wilts
 Dying slowly as Other Flowers Watch in pain an in Sorrow
 But as the elder flower dies a new one is birthed
 Slowly the pedals fall to the ground one by one
 The flame of life slowly dims but the body still remains
 Life is just a beautiful lie as death is a painful truth


When i wrote this one it was Last Year on Thanksgiving, My best-freind OD'ed
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on December 06, 2013, 09:41:59 PM
Wow that is truly powerful. As someone who is connected to nature, I can
 really feel that pain. You have a true skill being able to turn your emotions
 into such creative writing. This work really touched my heart and I would
like you to know that I will be keeping you and your friend in my thoughts
and in my prayers.


Sincerely,
Maska Sigo, The Fighting Raccoon
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 06, 2013, 10:39:50 PM
Oh Green!
 
That was very moving, but to know your reason for writing  :'(
Well, that is both tragic and very brave of you!
 
Please keep writing, your words can heal mister  :|
 
Trixsie
 
*puts paw on shoulder*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 06, 2013, 10:59:17 PM
Thanks both of you, i have some more but i'm at work so ill post them a little later who knows when :) and i will keep writing
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 07, 2013, 03:01:42 AM
No worries *hugs*.  Naturally Maska has very good taste, he IS my brother after all!
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 07, 2013, 01:23:03 PM
Really? Yeah I sent most of them to my enlish teacher...he said I had a talent aswell
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 09, 2013, 02:49:51 AM
As I walk through the beautiful warzone I smell the scent of blood and rotting flesh.
I wonder why all these men had to die as they pile up more and more like mesh.
I sit by a tree and watch them fight wondering why they fight and not speak?
Are they afraid to speak the unspoken words aloud to one another in Greek?
As I pounder upon the problem a bullet hits the tree I’m on as I look a man rushes.
Covered in a deep red blood pouring from his head down to the grassy green land.
The rich soil of this grassy green windblown land a lady walks by and looks at the men and blushes.
At the opening at the end of the grassy green windblown blood struck land many a man just stand.
As man after man falls I pay no attention I have no hostility regarding these men why do we fight.
I hide under bridges and fallen trees and I wonder why we must kill these men I could befriend.
All of a sudden the bombardment stopped the grassy green land I once saw was all but dirt and blood.
I close my eyes trying to unsee what I have seen I want to keep that vision of that grassy green land.
But now all I can see is barren land the air filled with the stench of blood and rot.
A tear rolls down my bloody dirt covered cheek and drops down into a pool of blood and mud.
As I stare into the sky all I see is a bright light and I pounder as I cry did I do what was right.
I walk along with the men I knew when we were boys now smoking a drinking is this the end?
I wonder why these old men that send us in to these hell holes will not talk or fight their own battle.
I sleep at night scared to close my eye in fear I may die or get shot.
As I lay on the ground keeping my eye open scared to sleep I remember home my family and my cattle.
I see a light a bright light that feels more loving and peaceful that what is on this earth and sleep.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 09, 2013, 03:13:26 AM
 D:
 
Wow... I can see it and hear it.
 
Is this one from the vaults or something new?
 
It's like... Pink Floyd meets Banjo Patterson!
 
*admiration hug*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 09, 2013, 03:15:17 AM
That was from 5/6/2012


i forget what caused it...i think hearing someone from my state died overseas or something cause me to write or i was watching a WW2 movie i forget
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 09, 2013, 10:59:55 PM
The Love Of A Daughter


One fine day in the middle of the night so happy and bright I walked through a graveyard
No one dead in sight but for the stones that danced around the graveyard light as a feather
The skeletons flourish to show their former selves and even the corpses look like leather
There I find a Vault the one of Marian Wilson Epps the Bard He Had It Hard Being a Bard
She would plan and play for many people around only to get a pound she played hard
And she played good but only one thing she was made out of wood
Then there is the Catacomb there was about ten men all made out of bone
Dancing their fat bouncing and their hearts tapping these skeletons could always moan
As I walk deeper and deeper I find the well it looks as well as I do all broken and cracked
I yell into the well “Lassie go get help” and laugh I walk along side of the church its Hacked
To all ends I go in and see the altar and thank him for this gift and walk out to the grass so green
It sways and the Morning dew glances at me with glares of the light of the moon
I walk alone threw the street on the boulevard of dead dreams in this dark morning of gloom
I walk into the graveyard once again can climb into a hole with the box looking like me decayed
[size=0pt]And falling apart as I drop in I realize what I miss most of all is my love who is next to me whose soul prayed[/size]
Is not trapped on this earth I just miss her than I hate the one who gave me some more time to live but was slaughtered
[size=0pt]As I close my box I look up at the moon and as a tear rolls down my decayed face I finally give to my daughter[/size]
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on December 10, 2013, 01:15:42 AM
Your writings are always so moving... I just... wow. Your word speak to me like nothing before it... your awesome, that is an understatement...
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 10, 2013, 01:22:40 AM
Really.....i have always though they sucked but i guess that's because i write them who knows im trying to think of what to do with them because there is no way i can publish them into a book....idk what to do to get them noticed
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 10, 2013, 01:33:51 AM
Well I've noticed them, so that's a start!
 
I love your style.  It, IDK, takes you to a place not just an idea.  You might be suited to scriptwriting!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 10, 2013, 01:36:11 AM
what do you mean by that? im really curious
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 10, 2013, 01:52:05 AM
Well, you can't say what people are thinking or other abstract stuff in a script, it's all about visually revealing a capturable image.  I struggle because I want to put in word play and crap... I can make other people see what I see, but I can't describe a scene that a hundred individuals can actualize.  I think maybe you could.
 
*remembers PhD on the philosophy of the language of film I'm meant to be reading*
 
Anyway, keep at it and never trust an English teacher!  XD
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 10, 2013, 01:54:54 AM
Ooh okay i can do that but it takes so much time to write one lol...who know a movie maybe nice to make but i doubt it will go anywhere
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 10, 2013, 07:52:03 AM
[size=0pt]As I get in my car and flip on the radio I hear some songs and think where did all the good music go?[/size]
[size=0pt]My car is filled with words my ears cannot stand words that make me wonder how they get a show.[/size]
[size=0pt]As I go barreling down ol route 66 the smell of the sun beating on the sand as I change the station.[/size]
[size=0pt]As the speakers come to life a loud screech from a guitar comes upon my ears, its rock nation.[/size]
[size=0pt]I smile and say to myself “This is where people put their hearts in every written score.”[/size]
[size=0pt]I make a Left on to the Highway where speeding cars flash by me and I ride on the trucker’s back door.[/size]
[size=0pt]The honking of car horns come from every direction so I roll up my windows and I turn the knob.[/size]
[size=0pt]Out comes a hippen happen beat that seems to make the car bounce and windows shake and my head bob.[/size]
[size=0pt]I switch the show and hammer down like I have wings I fly by 6 chicks given em a wink faster than a blink.[/size]
[size=0pt]I see a cop ahead and jam my stick and lost 20 quick hearin a chang cling thwack clink.[/size]
[size=0pt]I switch the station again as I pull in to get gas and hear a loud bumin and thumpin in my car.[/size]
[size=0pt]I pump the gas as I smell the gasoline fumes with a smile I get back in and I hear vulgar words in my car.[/size]
[size=0pt]I think to myself “What happened to people that used to put their hearts in every written score?[/size]
[size=0pt]I drive shaking my head at the songs passing on the radio I then hit a spot where only static comes.[/size]
[size=0pt]I turn the dial to a new station and start moving my head in all directions while the beat is erotic not poor.[/size]
[size=0pt]I pull in to my destination still thinking about the dirty songs I had heard and sigh why do they come?[/size]
[size=0pt]I walk in to my country home with the smell of fresh cooked apple pie hearing good ol fashion clean music.[/size]
 
 
 Where did the music go......this i have no clue it does not sound very good maybe make a song out of it lol
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 10, 2013, 08:03:26 AM
*Clapping*

Who's been hiding this stuff?  Awesome.

Do you need chords?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 10, 2013, 08:07:09 AM
Yeah if i wanna make it a song....they are all hidden on my PC i wrote them....about 2-3 years ago....i need to write more :D
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 10, 2013, 09:49:07 AM
You should write more.  Foxes are great writers, almost as good as dragons!

Do you play any instruments?  *Trixsie is SO dizzy today*

"I can't even cartwheel"

*Handstand*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 10, 2013, 02:49:04 PM
nope i can't play anything lol i have a guitar but gave up on it....i wanna get Rocksmith lol maybe i can do something there
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 10, 2013, 08:56:55 PM
Well, I've written some music to start.

Rocksmith?

Is it technical? I can't even get me Smiley set working again...
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 10, 2013, 09:03:19 PM
*Licks Cheek*


This is my 1st song and only :D



All it is, is a Video Game that teaches you guitar :D


*Pokes*


Still dizzy?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on December 10, 2013, 09:44:48 PM
 XD You two are so cute :3 ... Don't mind me


Maska out
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 15, 2013, 08:01:50 AM
When the Moon and the snow falls silently
I drive through the night, someone at my side
The roads slowly disappearing from view covered in white blanket
Despairingly I keep driving with no end in sight
I see a figure tail wagging in the distance
I slam on the breaks sliding off into the distance
I feel a warm tug on my arm I fall out onto the cold blanket
I hear a small growl as I am drug through the snow watching as it falls
Covering my face flake by flake in the dull grey sky
Soon everything slowly fades to black as fur brushes my cheek and a lick upon my nose
3 nights and i just finished this
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on December 15, 2013, 08:08:31 AM
Been there done that... Bad wreck one year... I swear you write the story of my life!! You are truely amazing I just can't get over how you do that... just perfection
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 15, 2013, 08:10:37 AM
Idk i need to keep alot of these but i won't  remember this in the morning im ganna try
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 15, 2013, 11:53:49 AM
"Ahh!" *eyes bright*

I love this!  3 nights, good job.  Those waggy tails are trouble!!

It make me want a hot-water bottle *brrrrr*

*Twirls*

 :*

Lala!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 15, 2013, 01:40:45 PM
:* It takes me forever to get anything good working out of my brain and I can only do it at night
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 15, 2013, 02:59:02 PM
Well, one has to know when to do creative battle!

I wonder if you know Pink Floyd's Final Cut album?  Reminds me of you thematically.  Gunners dream, a fave track...

*Sleepy*

Floating down, through the clouds, memories come rushing up to meet me now....

*Snuggle*
 -.-
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: HyenaKing on December 15, 2013, 03:04:03 PM
 Cool, trixie, since this seems more fun than i thought, i just might start my own thread. Some ideas brewing.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 15, 2013, 03:29:35 PM
"You go Fox!   What were we talking about?"

Brewing ideas are my favourite kind!

*hugs*

Hah!  You're fun, so there :P
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 15, 2013, 03:37:54 PM
Go for it Tfv I bet you have some great ones :D
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Post by: HyenaKing on December 15, 2013, 03:40:03 PM
Once its done bewing, i'm sure youll find a started tgread here. Since im possibly the only nutral,  i might implement the thoughts tat go though my head.
Something like this.
Why?
I find that unessary for yiu to say that!
Why are.. go sleep somewhere else, im tired.
I wonder why now she attacked me while i was setting my alarm
Good,  go home, weirdo.
I just wonder.
Why?


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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 15, 2013, 10:55:43 PM
By Jove he's got it!

*remembers to check for new thread later*
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Post by: HyenaKing on December 15, 2013, 11:10:47 PM
 ^_^

Too sweet of you.
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 16, 2013, 12:24:58 AM
*Punches shoulder*

 ^_^
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Post by: HyenaKing on December 16, 2013, 12:26:17 AM
*Hold in smile*
Go check! Go!
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 16, 2013, 05:09:14 AM
*bright eyes!*  THE HUNT!

"OK, where is it?  NO!  Don't tell me..."

*Sniffs ground*

"By..e..e..e.!"

*Runs off*
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 16, 2013, 05:12:18 AM
Dang....she can zoom off at the speed of light :O
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Post by: MaskaTheOtter on December 16, 2013, 05:17:30 AM
That's my sister for you. She is fast as lightning and I have cracks in my leg... It doesnt stop me from jogging an hour every day
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 16, 2013, 05:18:25 AM
Yeah lol i aint got much lol
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Post by: MaskaTheOtter on December 16, 2013, 05:20:53 AM
I am an endurance runner so I might not be the fastest but I sure can be the farthest
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 16, 2013, 05:24:50 AM
Hmmm okay...i need to write again i heard a song that gave me an idea
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 16, 2013, 06:34:23 AM
"OK I'm baaack!"

Runs up at v<C

 :?

"I didn't find it.  There was this taco stand... and a sale on running gear."

Poor Trixsie needs a link TFV!

 :3

Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on December 16, 2013, 06:39:26 AM
Is this what you are looking for *tilts head*:


http://www.thefurryforum.com/forums/index.php?topic=23913.0 (http://www.thefurryforum.com/forums/index.php?topic=23913.0)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 16, 2013, 06:40:11 AM
I couldnt find it eather
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 16, 2013, 08:05:05 AM
THanks Maska 

I'm a terrible tracking fox :(

Amazing post though huh?

 :D
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 16, 2013, 09:54:00 PM

The Demon is inside, It can not escape
it's claw tears at my flesh
Ripping and Tearing, nothing like a caress
Tears run down my face, Hiding the pain behind a smile
Alone in the dark the Demon claws at my soul more
My soul depletes itself into a realm of black,
a dim light flickering, fading,evanescent.

Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: HyenaKing on December 16, 2013, 11:23:53 PM

The Demon is inside, It can not escape
it's claw tears at my flesh
Ripping and Tearing, nothing like a caress
Tears run down my face, Hiding the pain behind a smile
Alone in the dark the Demon claws at my soul more
My soul depletes itself into a realm of black,
a dim light flickering, fading,evanescent.


Yes, Good! *Claps*
Vocabulary!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 17, 2013, 12:10:09 AM
Is that good or bad?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: HyenaKing on December 17, 2013, 12:13:06 AM
Beautiful!

Great!
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 17, 2013, 12:30:14 AM
Thank you :$
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Post by: HyenaKing on December 17, 2013, 12:31:19 AM
No need to blush, my friend.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 17, 2013, 01:05:58 AM
Ive never had my vocabulary complemented
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Post by: HyenaKing on December 17, 2013, 01:12:23 AM
I have had advanced collge students in reading used limited vocabulary.
Friends, that is.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 17, 2013, 01:18:57 AM
Oh...idk if I use them right....I just like how it fit
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Post by: HyenaKing on December 17, 2013, 01:20:58 AM
Some did not fit, but it's alright.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 17, 2013, 01:23:25 AM
Oh...oh well lol
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 17, 2013, 06:37:52 AM
I think it's wonderful!  My dark brooding poet <3

I saw no errors.  Again, very visceral, raw, creepy.  All the good stuff!

Maybe the demon is a Balrog Jolly?

YOU SHALL NOT PASS up this great writing!  ;)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 17, 2013, 06:42:18 AM
Thanks :D i was feeling a little dark....idky


Maybe who knows lol


idky i feel like writing more and more :D ;)
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 17, 2013, 09:24:56 PM
Sometimes writing feels like letting out poison.

Lol, I like your balance of light and dark! 

 XD I just thought of a song Darkside by Tim Minchin.

Dunno if it really fits but  XD anyway
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 18, 2013, 12:04:39 AM
I'll go listen to it :)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on December 18, 2013, 04:40:16 AM
Sometimes writing feels like letting out poison.
Lol, I like your balance of light and dark! 
 XD I just thought of a song Darkside by Tim Minchin.


I couldn't agree more
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 18, 2013, 04:43:09 AM
i was ganna add more guts and gore....but seemed too dark
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 18, 2013, 01:48:43 PM
Well, it's all about find the right balance for each piece.  Perhaps your next one should be a gory guts-fest!


I don't know if that would make it adult?  But maybe put a graphic content warning just in case!  :D
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 18, 2013, 03:28:56 PM
Good idea lol, Well soon ill start lol
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Post by: HyenaKing on December 19, 2013, 12:35:08 AM
*Brace for FG13 Content*

Fox guidence, for 13 pup years and older.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 19, 2013, 03:53:45 AM
Lmao i like that :D
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 19, 2013, 10:12:17 AM
*Brace for FG13 Content*

Fox guidence, for 13 pup years and older.

I'm laugh/crying!
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 19, 2013, 05:24:58 PM

This gun cold, raw steel against a head
The feeling of worthlessness and dread spread
The note that has been written no one will care
They fail to see what I am They are all doctrinaires
The trigger is easy to squeeze, but so hard to pull
They all think I'm fool
The trigger is pulled the gun goes off, with out a sound
The gun falls out of a hand, on to the ground
Their blood runs down my face as i grin
I soon begin to wonder, "was this a Sin?"
Now I am free, I am Me, Free


Not much of a Gory person i guess.....just dark.....OH well :D hope y'all enjoy
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 19, 2013, 09:59:32 PM
Hmmm, in someways this is my favourite one so far.

It makes me think of The Awakening by Alice Cooper.

The "terrible" deed revealed, followed by exultation.

OR something

*hugs*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 19, 2013, 10:12:05 PM
I like it :) I tried to make it seems like a suicide then end with murder
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 19, 2013, 10:20:08 PM
The sting in the tail!

You know I love that twist at the end stuff :)

*dancing*
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 20, 2013, 01:48:11 AM
YAYAYAYAYAY *Pokes*
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 20, 2013, 02:46:46 AM
 X3
*pokes*

Horror would be fun to write maybe.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 20, 2013, 02:55:43 AM
Mmmmm maybe...maybe I will write a short story lol idk
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 20, 2013, 03:05:14 AM
Here's the shortest one I know:

The last man in the world sat alone in his kitchen.  There is a knock at the door.

 D:
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 20, 2013, 12:13:15 PM
So scary D:
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Post by: nixon/monto on December 20, 2013, 08:26:07 PM
Storryy!!! Do one! I love story's
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 20, 2013, 08:28:32 PM
Lol :D okay i'll try one idk how long it will be :D atm im at work so i can't work on it at all
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Post by: nixon/monto on December 20, 2013, 08:29:54 PM
That's all right. As long as you do one. You can do it. And it will be amazing awesome! (Make it blow me away.)
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 20, 2013, 08:36:56 PM
Gory, sweet, cute what kind?
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Post by: nixon/monto on December 20, 2013, 09:26:59 PM
All of them!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 20, 2013, 09:28:08 PM
Okay i'll see what i can do
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 21, 2013, 06:23:32 AM
That's a hard balance to strike!  Though Sean of the Dead does  :)

I don't know what tone to take.  Just had an idea: A furry fanfic of Jos Whedon's 'Cabin in the Woods'!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 21, 2013, 05:09:58 PM
Why not try it, it would be neat...i have had no time to write at all this weekend...Between running and sleeping at work -.- GAH
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 21, 2013, 07:07:21 PM
Don't Fall Asleep!

*Krueger theme*

I've got a special art project!  So story on the back burner...
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 21, 2013, 07:42:58 PM
Hmmm my story on the back burner?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 21, 2013, 10:23:06 PM
nonono!

Mine.  Your story on the front burner!!

For Glory, for Science, for Nixon!

FOR BACON!!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 21, 2013, 10:52:46 PM
Oh lmao....well its on a mid burner atm
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Post by: nixon/monto on December 22, 2013, 12:37:24 AM
I got time. ( Im at great wolf lodge for the weekend any way.) time to relax
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 22, 2013, 01:52:47 AM
Lucky i have to see what i can do :)
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 22, 2013, 07:35:06 AM
Great Wolf lodge huh?

Is there a fox retreat too?

Hey story idea: a perfectly lovely wolf who turns into a savage human every full moon.

*shiver*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 22, 2013, 07:36:36 AM
That would be a tad creepy....
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: HyenaKing on December 22, 2013, 02:38:09 PM
Its a great idea.
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on December 22, 2013, 03:23:05 PM
*curtsies*

 XD

*Cartwheels*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: HyenaKing on December 22, 2013, 03:24:14 PM
Random cartwheel attack.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 09, 2014, 07:38:48 AM
Here's one Jolly wrote which is very precious to me:

She is Kind and Sincere a hint of evil is always inside
A small kink here some handcuffs and rope are always welcome
She remains kind though the roads she travels are never smooth
She loves to play, she loves to kid
A joke is never taken too far.
She’s a lover and a fighter she cares for others as if her own
She runs away from nothing and loves to giggle
 She is Beatrix
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on January 09, 2014, 07:42:37 AM
that is just so cute
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 09, 2014, 08:07:47 AM
It made me cry and rescued my Christmas from awfulness :')

<3 Mah Fox
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on January 09, 2014, 08:13:18 AM
you , my sister, only deserves the best of the best^,^
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 15, 2014, 04:52:37 PM
On a dreary night as the snow fell vastly across the land nothing visible but the wall of white and the dull lulling lights of the city in the distance, As the Fox walked bundled up in a heavy coat, paws in his pockets with an Olive green duffle bag hanging off of one shoulder and balaclava covering all but his eyes. His eyes watery from being hit by the flurry of snow attacking his body. The snow packed under his scuffed up brown combat boots. As the path seems to get longer and longer the Fox pulls his light brown paws out of his jacket whipping his delicate dazzling Green cat like eyes gently, no cars in sight only the the lights of the city in slumber.


(I will work on more but so far with do you think?)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 15, 2014, 04:59:26 PM
I like it!  But now I feel cold *shiver*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 17, 2014, 05:46:10 AM
YAY that was neat...never caused someone to be cold :) * Cuddles*  warming up?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: HyenaKing on January 17, 2014, 05:58:43 AM
Great, but id rather stay our of your convo.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 17, 2014, 10:00:13 PM
Oh Vulpy!  Come over here :)


*3-way warm up hugs*


I must warm up before Jolly write more!!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: HyenaKing on January 17, 2014, 11:00:16 PM
I'd not do much good because i lost alot of blood yesterday.
Tryin' to kill myself, and all.
But now i'm desiring to stay hrer for a bit longer.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 18, 2014, 03:26:49 AM
*Hugs tightly* You need to stay here alot longer
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: HyenaKing on January 18, 2014, 03:28:20 AM
You guys, man.

Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 18, 2014, 08:08:28 AM
What?  Seriously?  D:
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: HyenaKing on January 18, 2014, 08:09:48 AM
Yep.


Aaand cur non-dramatic music.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RWCQSXz6e-o&list=FLV-vyAFHocp6cg4BOvwFraQ (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RWCQSXz6e-o&list=FLV-vyAFHocp6cg4BOvwFraQ)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 18, 2014, 08:12:55 AM
Oh Vulpy!  I had no idea D=

*hugs*

Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: HyenaKing on January 18, 2014, 08:14:05 AM
You could have no clue.
*Hug*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 20, 2014, 06:40:47 AM
On a dreary night as the snow fell vastly across the land nothing visible but the wall of white and the dull lulling lights of the city in the distance, As the Fox walked bundled up in a heavy coat, paws in his pockets with an Olive green duffle bag hanging off of one shoulder and balaclava covering all but his eyes. His eyes watery from being hit by the flurry of snow attacking his body. The snow packed under his scuffed up brown combat boots. As the path seems to get longer and longer the Fox pulls his light brown paws out of his jacket whipping his delicate dazzling Green cat like eyes gently, no cars in sight only the the lights of the city in slumber.


(I will work on more but so far with do you think?)


The walk seemed to only drag on, the lights not moving closer but further away. The Fox walked on the crunching sound of the snow packing down sent vibrations from his boots to his spine, the cold winds whisper wrapping snow around his body as he shivers. Small dots of red follow the fox as he walks, appearing drop by drop behind him. The Fox continued walking hearing the sound of a vehicle driving he swung around his tail still in front of him as he turned, but there was no vehicle in sight. He turned around slowly to see a wolf in front of him. A puff of steamy breath comes from the wolf ask he speaks "What are you doing out here in this cold" The fox remained silent and nodded. The wolf was wearing a long overcoat with a few holes in it, His pants were thick Olive green and his boots covered in mud. The wolf walked behind the fox and before the fox could turn around he was gone, no footprints left, no sign.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 20, 2014, 11:20:37 AM
*bouncing*

"More, more!"

*eyes bright*

"I liked this installment... *giggles* the [/size]best!" *pouting*"If you're not too busy... more please!"


Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on January 20, 2014, 04:58:49 PM
Very nice and I am on Trixsie's side with this
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 20, 2014, 07:35:51 PM
On a dreary night as the snow fell vastly across the land nothing visible but the wall of white and the dull lulling lights of the city in the distance, As the Fox walked bundled up in a heavy coat, paws in his pockets with an Olive green duffle bag hanging off of one shoulder and balaclava covering all but his eyes. His eyes watery from being hit by the flurry of snow attacking his body. The snow packed under his scuffed up brown combat boots. As the path seems to get longer and longer the Fox pulls his light brown paws out of his jacket whipping his delicate dazzling Green cat like eyes gently, no cars in sight only the the lights of the city in slumber.


(I will work on more but so far with do you think?)


The walk seemed to only drag on, the lights not moving closer but further away. The Fox walked on the crunching sound of the snow packing down sent vibrations from his boots to his spine, the cold winds whisper wrapping snow around his body as he shivers. Small dots of red follow the fox as he walks, appearing drop by drop behind him. The Fox continued walking hearing the sound of a vehicle driving he swung around his tail still in front of him as he turned, but there was no vehicle in sight. He turned around slowly to see a wolf in front of him. A puff of steamy breath comes from the wolf ask he speaks "What are you doing out here in this cold" The fox remained silent and nodded. The wolf was wearing a long overcoat with a few holes in it, His pants were thick Olive green and his boots covered in mud. The wolf walked behind the fox and before the fox could turn around he was gone, no footprints left, no sign.


The fox sighed exhaling a puff of steam. The wolf looked familiar but he could not name the wolf, soon the fox began walking again his steps beginning to get slower. He looked up to see a sign on the road dimly lit saying "INN", the fox walked up to the inn and looked around, no cars, no people, just a building with all the windows busted out as if people wanted to escape, there was only one room with the windows intact. The door was cracked open slightly with the light on. The fox walked in and announced "Is anyone Here" the fox heard nothing and closed the door, The fox walked back into the bathroom and jumped in surprise griping his chest. In the tub was the wolf he saw earlier, He had cuts all over his body blood flowing out of each cut. The Fox quickly put his finger on the wolfs neck checking for a pulse but null there was none. The fox sighed and shook his head looking at the wolfs body seeing a dog tag, he fell to his knees and grab it quickly, looking at it closely, it read "David Goliath......1st Tank Battalion".



Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on January 20, 2014, 07:44:22 PM
That gave me the shivers... AWESOME
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 20, 2014, 07:51:48 PM
i need to add more detail.....hmmmmm.....that is easly fixed in the next part
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 21, 2014, 09:49:44 AM
I'm looking forward to reading from the start again :)


"so cold" *pulls blanket around tightly*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 21, 2014, 02:07:28 PM
On a dreary night as the snow fell vastly across the land nothing visible but the wall of white and the dull lulling lights of the city in the distance, As the Fox walked bundled up in a heavy coat, paws in his pockets with an Olive green duffle bag hanging off of one shoulder and balaclava covering all but his eyes. His eyes watery from being hit by the flurry of snow attacking his body. The snow packed under his scuffed up brown combat boots. As the path seems to get longer and longer the Fox pulls his light brown paws out of his jacket whipping his delicate dazzling Green cat like eyes gently, no cars in sight only the the lights of the city in slumber.


(I will work on more but so far with do you think?)


The walk seemed to only drag on, the lights not moving closer but further away. The Fox walked on the crunching sound of the snow packing down sent vibrations from his boots to his spine, the cold winds whisper wrapping snow around his body as he shivers. Small dots of red follow the fox as he walks, appearing drop by drop behind him. The Fox continued walking hearing the sound of a vehicle driving he swung around his tail still in front of him as he turned, but there was no vehicle in sight. He turned around slowly to see a wolf in front of him. A puff of steamy breath comes from the wolf ask he speaks "What are you doing out here in this cold" The fox remained silent and nodded. The wolf was wearing a long overcoat with a few holes in it, His pants were thick Olive green and his boots covered in mud. The wolf walked behind the fox and before the fox could turn around he was gone, no footprints left, no sign.


The fox sighed exhaling a puff of steam. The wolf looked familiar but he could not name the wolf, soon the fox began walking again his steps beginning to get slower. He looked up to see a sign on the road dimly lit saying "INN", the fox walked up to the inn and looked around, no cars, no people, just a building with all the windows busted out as if people wanted to escape, there was only one room with the windows intact. The door was cracked open slightly with the light on. The fox walked in and announced "Is anyone Here" the fox heard nothing and closed the door, The fox walked back into the bathroom and jumped in surprise griping his chest. In the tub was the wolf he saw earlier, He had cuts all over his body blood flowing out of each cut. The Fox quickly put his finger on the wolfs neck checking for a pulse but null there was none. The fox sighed and shook his head looking at the wolfs body seeing a dog tag, he fell to his knees and grab it quickly, looking at it closely, it read "David Goliath......1st Tank Battalion".


The fox begun to tear up and fall to his knees clenching the dog tags, tears falling from his muzzle down onto the dog tags and the floor. The fox took a steady and slow deep breath and as he stood his knees weak he mustered a small voice and the word "Brother" came out in a sweet soothing gruff voice. Looking at the body the fox pulled a blanket out of his duffle bag and covered the body and shed some more tears running down his muzzle, gasping for a breath. As he walked away from the body he looked around the room, The King sized bed's covers were gone and the bed itself was covered in dry blood, looking at the desk in the room covered in dust it had a note but the writings were chicken scratch and covered in dried blood. The fox Ran out of the room crying falling his back to the wall in the snow uncontrollably sobbing as the snow wiped his eyes, Soon the fox regain composure and punched out the windows to the room from the outside his hand bleeding from the glass shards dripping into the snow and turning the flakes around his hand red with blood, The fox begun to walk again still tears roll down his muzzle into the snow and it whips across his face.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 21, 2014, 02:35:37 PM
[fade to black]


Definitely a screenwriter in the making Mr Fox! :)


Though I don't see this reaching the rom-com demographic.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 21, 2014, 02:37:20 PM
Whats that?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 21, 2014, 02:47:51 PM
The romantic comedy fanbase XD


I think you'd fit well with Guillermo del Toro as a director.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 21, 2014, 02:49:26 PM
Hey the story aint done....i cumming up with it slowly
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 21, 2014, 02:58:44 PM
Well, if you make it into a romantic comedy I will be stunned.


Please keep writing.  If this is what happens when we don't have much chat time maybe I should stay away, let you get your creative juices flowing ;)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 21, 2014, 03:03:09 PM
Its fine :) im just all creatived out :(
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 21, 2014, 03:34:27 PM
Great effort though.  It makes me want to do some serious RP.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 21, 2014, 04:02:53 PM
Awesome :D, i like writing....maybe i should try and write a book....but wouldn't get anywhere least i think so
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 29, 2014, 04:20:33 AM
On a dreary night as the snow fell vastly across the land nothing visible but the wall of white and the dull lulling lights of the city in the distance, As the Fox walked bundled up in a heavy coat, paws in his pockets with an Olive green duffle bag hanging off of one shoulder and balaclava covering all but his eyes. His eyes watery from being hit by the flurry of snow attacking his body. The snow packed under his scuffed up brown combat boots. As the path seems to get longer and longer the Fox pulls his light brown paws out of his jacket whipping his delicate dazzling Green cat like eyes gently, no cars in sight only the the lights of the city in slumber.


(I will work on more but so far with do you think?)


The walk seemed to only drag on, the lights not moving closer but further away. The Fox walked on the crunching sound of the snow packing down sent vibrations from his boots to his spine, the cold winds whisper wrapping snow around his body as he shivers. Small dots of red follow the fox as he walks, appearing drop by drop behind him. The Fox continued walking hearing the sound of a vehicle driving he swung around his tail still in front of him as he turned, but there was no vehicle in sight. He turned around slowly to see a wolf in front of him. A puff of steamy breath comes from the wolf ask he speaks "What are you doing out here in this cold" The fox remained silent and nodded. The wolf was wearing a long overcoat with a few holes in it, His pants were thick Olive green and his boots covered in mud. The wolf walked behind the fox and before the fox could turn around he was gone, no footprints left, no sign.


The fox sighed exhaling a puff of steam. The wolf looked familiar but he could not name the wolf, soon the fox began walking again his steps beginning to get slower. He looked up to see a sign on the road dimly lit saying "INN", the fox walked up to the inn and looked around, no cars, no people, just a building with all the windows busted out as if people wanted to escape, there was only one room with the windows intact. The door was cracked open slightly with the light on. The fox walked in and announced "Is anyone Here" the fox heard nothing and closed the door, The fox walked back into the bathroom and jumped in surprise griping his chest. In the tub was the wolf he saw earlier, He had cuts all over his body blood flowing out of each cut. The Fox quickly put his finger on the wolfs neck checking for a pulse but null there was none. The fox sighed and shook his head looking at the wolfs body seeing a dog tag, he fell to his knees and grab it quickly, looking at it closely, it read "David Goliath......1st Tank Battalion".


The fox begun to tear up and fall to his knees clenching the dog tags, tears falling from his muzzle down onto the dog tags and the floor. The fox took a steady and slow deep breath and as he stood his knees weak he mustered a small voice and the word "Brother" came out in a sweet soothing gruff voice. Looking at the body the fox pulled a blanket out of his duffle bag and covered the body and shed some more tears running down his muzzle, gasping for a breath. As he walked away from the body he looked around the room, The King sized bed's covers were gone and the bed itself was covered in dry blood, looking at the desk in the room covered in dust it had a note but the writings were chicken scratch and covered in dried blood. The fox Ran out of the room crying falling his back to the wall in the snow uncontrollably sobbing as the snow wiped his eyes, Soon the fox regain composure and punched out the windows to the room from the outside his hand bleeding from the glass shards dripping into the snow and turning the flakes around his hand red with blood, The fox begun to walk again still tears roll down his muzzle into the snow as it whips across his face.


As the snow begun to whorl around the fox he clenched his hand against his chest the blood draining down his shirt the fox begun wobbling left and right and his vision had begun to get blurry, he let out a light sigh and murmured to him self "Anger got the best of me again" His voice seemed soft as silk but had a small crack in is as if he wasn't even an adult, as he continued to walk the snow had gotten deeper and deeper once more almost up to his ankles he shuffled through the snow pushing it out of his way slowly.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 29, 2014, 10:23:00 AM
Keep up the creative writing :)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 20, 2014, 03:23:09 AM
On a dreary night as the snow fell vastly across the land nothing visible but the wall of white and the dull lulling lights of the city in the distance, As the Fox walked bundled up in a heavy coat, paws in his pockets with an Olive green duffle bag hanging off of one shoulder and balaclava covering all but his eyes. His eyes watery from being hit by the flurry of snow attacking his body. The snow packed under his scuffed up brown combat boots. As the path seems to get longer and longer the Fox pulls his light brown paws out of his jacket whipping his delicate dazzling Green cat like eyes gently, no cars in sight only the the lights of the city in slumber.


(I will work on more but so far with do you think?)


The walk seemed to only drag on, the lights not moving closer but further away. The Fox walked on the crunching sound of the snow packing down sent vibrations from his boots to his spine, the cold winds whisper wrapping snow around his body as he shivers. Small dots of red follow the fox as he walks, appearing drop by drop behind him. The Fox continued walking hearing the sound of a vehicle driving he swung around his tail still in front of him as he turned, but there was no vehicle in sight. He turned around slowly to see a wolf in front of him. A puff of steamy breath comes from the wolf ask he speaks "What are you doing out here in this cold" The fox remained silent and nodded. The wolf was wearing a long overcoat with a few holes in it, His pants were thick Olive green and his boots covered in mud. The wolf walked behind the fox and before the fox could turn around he was gone, no footprints left, no sign.


The fox sighed exhaling a puff of steam. The wolf looked familiar but he could not name the wolf, soon the fox began walking again his steps beginning to get slower. He looked up to see a sign on the road dimly lit saying "INN", the fox walked up to the inn and looked around, no cars, no people, just a building with all the windows busted out as if people wanted to escape, there was only one room with the windows intact. The door was cracked open slightly with the light on. The fox walked in and announced "Is anyone Here" the fox heard nothing and closed the door, The fox walked back into the bathroom and jumped in surprise griping his chest. In the tub was the wolf he saw earlier, He had cuts all over his body blood flowing out of each cut. The Fox quickly put his finger on the wolfs neck checking for a pulse but null there was none. The fox sighed and shook his head looking at the wolfs body seeing a dog tag, he fell to his knees and grab it quickly, looking at it closely, it read "David Goliath......1st Tank Battalion".


The fox begun to tear up and fall to his knees clenching the dog tags, tears falling from his muzzle down onto the dog tags and the floor. The fox took a steady and slow deep breath and as he stood his knees weak he mustered a small voice and the word "Brother" came out in a sweet soothing gruff voice. Looking at the body the fox pulled a blanket out of his duffle bag and covered the body and shed some more tears running down his muzzle, gasping for a breath. As he walked away from the body he looked around the room, The King sized bed's covers were gone and the bed itself was covered in dry blood, looking at the desk in the room covered in dust it had a note but the writings were chicken scratch and covered in dried blood. The fox Ran out of the room crying falling his back to the wall in the snow uncontrollably sobbing as the snow wiped his eyes, Soon the fox regain composure and punched out the windows to the room from the outside his hand bleeding from the glass shards dripping into the snow and turning the flakes around his hand red with blood, The fox begun to walk again still tears roll down his muzzle into the snow as it whips across his face.


As the snow begun to whorl around the fox he clenched his hand against his chest the blood draining down his shirt the fox begun wobbling left and right and his vision had begun to get blurry, he let out a light sigh and murmured to him self "Anger got the best of me again" His voice seemed soft as silk but had a small crack in is as if he wasn't even an adult, as he continued to walk the snow had gotten deeper and deeper once more almost up to his ankles he shuffled through the snow pushing it out of his way slowly.


Soon the fox came upon a small house with a light on inside, he walked slowly and knocked on the door shivering as he waited for a reply. The fox waited a bit longer and soon turned to knob, His ears perked up and he was able to turn the knob to open the door. He hurried in and sat near the fire coming from the stove taking his wet clothes off and hanging them on the pipes, by now the fox had nothing but a pair of boxers on and only the heat from the stove to keep him warm. "I must thank whom ever house this belongs to for staying here" he though as he began to doze off next to the stove.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on March 20, 2014, 08:55:29 AM
Mmmmhmmm!


*covers eyes*


*peaks*


 :$
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 20, 2014, 03:07:13 PM
lol nice :3
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on March 20, 2014, 05:53:11 PM
Purving aside, I wan to know who's house it is!  Will they turn up?  Will they be cranky?




SUSPENSE!!  D:
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 20, 2014, 06:21:21 PM
Lol yeah im ganna need to work on that seems like your the only one who reads it lol
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on March 20, 2014, 06:28:51 PM
Yeah, I'm thinking I need to start up Trixsie's book club to bring attention to my most beloved writers!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 20, 2014, 06:55:33 PM
Hmmm i wonder how tht would work :3 YAY
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on March 20, 2014, 11:21:27 PM
Hmmmm?


*contemplative stare into middle distance*


 :?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 21, 2014, 03:28:30 AM
Thinking about it?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: NautilusWolf on March 22, 2014, 12:24:04 AM


As I walk through the beautiful warzone I smell the scent of blood and rotting flesh.
I wonder why all these men had to die as they pile up more and more like mesh.
I sit by a tree and watch them fight wondering why they fight and not speak?
Are they afraid to speak the unspoken words aloud to one another in Greek?
As I pounder upon the problem a bullet hits the tree I’m on as I look a man rushes.
Covered in a deep red blood pouring from his head down to the grassy green land.
The rich soil of this grassy green windblown land a lady walks by and looks at the men and blushes.
At the opening at the end of the grassy green windblown blood struck land many a man just stand.
As man after man falls I pay no attention I have no hostility regarding these men why do we fight.
I hide under bridges and fallen trees and I wonder why we must kill these men I could befriend.
All of a sudden the bombardment stopped the grassy green land I once saw was all but dirt and blood.
I close my eyes trying to unsee what I have seen I want to keep that vision of that grassy green land.
But now all I can see is barren land the air filled with the stench of blood and rot.
A tear rolls down my bloody dirt covered cheek and drops down into a pool of blood and mud.
As I stare into the sky all I see is a bright light and I pounder as I cry did I do what was right.
I walk along with the men I knew when we were boys now smoking a drinking is this the end?
I wonder why these old men that send us in to these hell holes will not talk or fight their own battle.
I sleep at night scared to close my eye in fear I may die or get shot.
As I lay on the ground keeping my eye open scared to sleep I remember home my family and my cattle.
I see a light a bright light that feels more loving and peaceful that what is on this earth and sleep.




Not gonna cry...





Flowering DeathDeath is like a wilting flower
 Pedals fall until the last Pedal of life has dropped
 Dying amongst the living as the flower wilts
 Dying slowly as Other Flowers Watch in pain an in Sorrow
 But as the elder flower dies a new one is birthed
 Slowly the pedals fall to the ground one by one
 The flame of life slowly dims but the body still remains
 Life is just a beautiful lie as death is a painful truth
When i wrote this one it was Last Year on Thanksgiving, My best-freind OD'ed



NOT GONNA CRY, :$







This gun cold, raw steel against a head
The feeling of worthlessness and dread spread
The note that has been written no one will care
They fail to see what I am They are all doctrinaires
The trigger is easy to squeeze, but so hard to pull
They all think I'm fool
The trigger is pulled the gun goes off, with out a sound
The gun falls out of a hand, on to the ground
Their blood runs down my face as i grin
I soon begin to wonder, "was this a Sin?"
Now I am free, I am Me, Free


Not much of a Gory person i guess.....just dark.....OH well :D hope y'all enjoy





*bawling* IT'S SO SAD!!!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 23, 2014, 03:54:20 AM
im glad you liked them :)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: NautilusWolf on March 23, 2014, 04:01:45 AM
They. We're. BEAUTIFUL.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 23, 2014, 04:14:58 AM
Really....ive always though they could be better...maybe its just me?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: NautilusWolf on March 23, 2014, 05:01:14 AM
That's every writer. And sometimes, they could be, but I thoroughly enjoyed them.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 23, 2014, 05:05:38 AM
May i ask what one you enjoyed more?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: NautilusWolf on March 23, 2014, 05:10:43 AM
As I walk through the beautiful warzone I smell the scent of blood and rotting flesh.
I wonder why all these men had to die as they pile up more and more like mesh.
I sit by a tree and watch them fight wondering why they fight and not speak?
Are they afraid to speak the unspoken words aloud to one another in Greek?
As I pounder upon the problem a bullet hits the tree I’m on as I look a man rushes.
Covered in a deep red blood pouring from his head down to the grassy green land.
The rich soil of this grassy green windblown land a lady walks by and looks at the men and blushes.
At the opening at the end of the grassy green windblown blood struck land many a man just stand.
As man after man falls I pay no attention I have no hostility regarding these men why do we fight.
I hide under bridges and fallen trees and I wonder why we must kill these men I could befriend.
All of a sudden the bombardment stopped the grassy green land I once saw was all but dirt and blood.
I close my eyes trying to unsee what I have seen I want to keep that vision of that grassy green land.
But now all I can see is barren land the air filled with the stench of blood and rot.
A tear rolls down my bloody dirt covered cheek and drops down into a pool of blood and mud.
As I stare into the sky all I see is a bright light and I pounder as I cry did I do what was right.
I walk along with the men I knew when we were boys now smoking a drinking is this the end?
I wonder why these old men that send us in to these hell holes will not talk or fight their own battle.
I sleep at night scared to close my eye in fear I may die or get shot.
As I lay on the ground keeping my eye open scared to sleep I remember home my family and my cattle.
I see a light a bright light that feels more loving and peaceful that what is on this earth and sleep.




My family has served in every generation to the U.S. military.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 23, 2014, 05:13:03 AM
I thank them for their service....i forgot why i wrote that....think i saw something on tv about military deaths over the course of every war
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Post by: NautilusWolf on March 23, 2014, 05:39:41 AM
I thank every service member I can. I am next in line.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 23, 2014, 05:42:24 AM
I do too and sadly not many people do anymore
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Post by: NautilusWolf on March 23, 2014, 05:43:53 AM
Yeah, I have a rant about it actually.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 23, 2014, 05:50:44 AM
I said thank you to a USMC man but he looked confused
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Post by: NautilusWolf on March 23, 2014, 05:57:23 AM
Marines are tough as steel.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 23, 2014, 06:11:08 AM
Thats true
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on March 23, 2014, 10:03:03 AM
Jolly has a real gift for capturing emotion IMHO
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Post by: MaskaTheOtter on March 25, 2014, 06:15:50 AM
I always enjoy reading His work
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 25, 2014, 06:28:00 AM
The Darkness


As i walk in the darkness seeing a light at the end of the tunnel
Each step i take the light seems to fade
I stop standing still to see the light no longer fade or brighten
I begun to walk backwards as the shines brighter along the tunnel
as i no longer is the tunnel open but closed enclosed in darkness
I stand still watching the light fade once more as i run forward standing in the middle of the long tunnel
only to keep the light bright and me in darkness
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Post by: MaskaTheOtter on March 25, 2014, 06:37:30 AM
Oh that is deep but I have been there bro
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 25, 2014, 07:21:45 AM
I know
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on March 25, 2014, 08:43:30 AM
*Nods*


Yeah, dem feelz  :|
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 26, 2014, 10:21:15 AM
I got so much running through my mind but its hard to type on a cell phone
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Post by: Tyga on March 27, 2014, 10:29:41 AM

The Demon is inside, It can not escape
it's claw tears at my flesh
Ripping and Tearing, nothing like a caress
Tears run down my face, Hiding the pain behind a smile
Alone in the dark the Demon claws at my soul more
My soul depletes itself into a realm of black,
a dim light flickering, fading,evanescent.


one of the best short poems I've ever read




I do have a few little criticisms with the story
(I always feel like such an ass writing these things -_-)


Overall very good story and look forward to reading more.  :)





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Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 27, 2014, 11:08:24 AM
I always welcome criticisms, it is always needed. Sometimes i can be descriptive and other times no so much poems are my main thing.....or so i believe i maybe wrong about that too :3 who knows.....it sad im sitting at work at 7AM i don't start till 9AM lol
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 31, 2014, 05:30:02 AM
The Shadows

Slowly the shadows creep towards me with the flicker of each candle.
As the shadows reach my legs i can feel the impulses fill my body.
I try to resist the urges i feel as the shadows climb higher and higher up my body
As the shadows cover my face i weep as i lose my vision
As i wake with a knife in my body covered in crimson red
The knife drops as i look in each room...The shadows have finally won.
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on March 31, 2014, 10:53:05 AM
 D:


Oh.... Jolly. 


*shiver*


 :'(
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 31, 2014, 12:49:55 PM
Darkest thing I've writen in a long time


*Hugs*
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Post by: Tim Siguire on April 03, 2014, 04:40:21 AM
I like your work, Jolly! Pretty visual... omnioptic, if that's a word.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 03, 2014, 11:24:18 AM
Danke :3 atm im in a parking garage right next to the court  @.@
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 03, 2014, 01:16:15 PM
I hope you get Judge Judy!
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 04, 2014, 05:38:08 AM
As the falling tears of angels caresses my cheek
I wonder if i had done the wrong thing
The angelic voices blow by me pushing the leaves in the trees
Green like envy the leaves fall one by one
(It feels unfinished but idk)



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Post by: Tim Siguire on April 04, 2014, 05:51:18 AM
It does seem short.... you could leave it like that or add another line, maybe reference something, anything.
One tip, you don't have to use %%, just use (size=##pt) (/size) >> Example
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 04, 2014, 06:11:30 AM
Idk how it did that....a font attack maybe

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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 04, 2014, 06:25:58 AM
I like it very much.  If it says what you hoped, then it's not short, it's just perfect :3
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Post by: Tim Siguire on April 04, 2014, 06:34:05 AM
Sometimes short is better. And maybe easier. :)
The poem is good though
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 04, 2014, 06:35:17 AM
eh lol
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 07, 2014, 03:40:53 AM
Sitting alone in the shadows makes a man wonder if someone is hiding in the shadows
Creaking and cracking all around, shows swirling and body shuddering.
as the shadows approach, nails long and sharp crawling up my arms and legs
Cutting into my skin like a blade through grass, as i clench up in agony i can hear the shadows begin laughing
Their long finger and long nails wrap around my neck and before long everything goes black
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Post by: MaskaTheOtter on April 07, 2014, 04:48:14 AM
Deep... and I feel like that would give me nightmares
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Post by: Tim Siguire on April 07, 2014, 05:21:11 AM
My fear of Shadows has been put to words! YES Jolly, you are good.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 07, 2014, 05:28:32 AM
Danke :3 im kinda creeped out as like where is it coming from ya know?
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 07, 2014, 05:29:35 AM
Makes me think of the Shadow creatures in the film Ghost
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 07, 2014, 05:55:06 AM
good point lol
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 14, 2014, 04:03:04 PM
Just a Game




Life is just a game, We only play never to win
So many achievements unachieved
The game of us plays us all for fool, stings attached so many silly rules
Life so many trophies gathered, none worth a cent
Life is just a game, rich or poor we play the same
No way to win, its all a game, playing all of us for fools
Yanking each string making us do what we do
Life is just a game, win or lose its all the same
Life is just that of a game
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 14, 2014, 04:14:56 PM
I like it, dunno why but this one say 'lyrics' to me.

Song! Song! Song! Song! Song!
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 14, 2014, 04:22:21 PM
Kinda where it came from but i added words and used words


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UbHY7vBAp4o (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UbHY7vBAp4o)
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 14, 2014, 04:29:03 PM
HA!


This fox sees everything :D


That is a cool song actually.  Though your poem is easily its own creation.



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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 14, 2014, 04:35:27 PM
Maybe....idk :(
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 14, 2014, 04:39:00 PM
True story.


I recommend (if I may be so bold) you do one more draft (or have someone play editor for grammar and flow) and I'll write music for it.


It has a different tone than that song and has a very different philosophical emphasis.  I think it would be great.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 14, 2014, 04:42:34 PM
If you would like to, my voice sucks for singing lol and if anyone wants the can...i can try and re write it but i need a temp or some music to go to
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 14, 2014, 04:53:01 PM
I guess this is my sort of thing, how's this look to you:  :?



Verse 1
Life is just a game,
We only play, never to win
So many achievements
Achievements  unachieved


Chorus
The game of us
Plays us all for fools
Strings attached
So many silly rules


Verse 2
Life so many trophies gathered
None worth a cent
Life is just a game
Rich or poor we play the same


Bridge
No way to win, it’s all a game
Playing all of us for fools


[Repeat Chorus]


Verse 3
Yanking each string
Making us do what we do
Life is just a game
Win or lose its all the same


[Repeat Chorus]


Life is just that of a game

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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 14, 2014, 05:01:11 PM
I like it and depending what rythm you put it too it could sounds good
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 14, 2014, 08:00:32 PM
OK, I did an Excel file.  Ran out of time to do a chord chart.  It will be easy though it's basically two bars for each chord except for 1 chord per bar for a few at the end of sections.


Let's hope this PDF attaches

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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 14, 2014, 09:37:23 PM
I will down load it when I get home thanks :3
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 14, 2014, 11:34:00 PM
*hugs*


I could try an record some piano on my phone.  But the recording quality sounds like a steel drum through a phaser pedal :/


It's meant for guitar in my head *shrugs*


:D
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Post by: NautilusWolf on April 15, 2014, 01:08:39 AM
Just a Game




Life is just a game, We only play never to win
So many achievements unachieved
The game of us plays us all for fool, stings attached so many silly rules
Life so many trophies gathered, none worth a cent
Life is just a game, rich or poor we play the same
No way to win, its all a game, playing all of us for fools
Yanking each string making us do what we do
Life is just a game, win or lose its all the same
Life is just that of a game
It's more of a battle. It's worse when you don't know who's on your side, and you are your own enemy. That's a bit of my life with OCD. The plague is everywhere, you are all after me, and we have to view the blackened soul we have become into the mirror because control of our own thoughts slip away like sand between our fingers. I live every day in fear and hope. But It drives me to conquer it, and with enough determination, I will.
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Post by: Tyga on April 15, 2014, 01:12:39 AM
I'll have a shot at recording it on guitar tonight. I'll upload it somewhere in the next couple of days if my recording doesnt sound like ass
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 15, 2014, 02:17:20 AM
Thanks Tyga....my singing voice sounds like ass lmao who knows


im surprised its gotten this far
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Post by: Tyga on April 15, 2014, 02:19:36 AM
we'll make you famous...and collect royalties :P
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 15, 2014, 02:29:29 AM
Lmao right......i'm looking for a violin again maybe
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Post by: nixon/monto on April 15, 2014, 12:37:38 PM
The writer, the maker, the singer. I can see that. You guys should become like a small band! Or something...or would be awesome! You would be like the next kurrel the raven!


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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 15, 2014, 12:42:04 PM
from all parts of the world and become famous on youtube?
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Post by: nixon/monto on April 15, 2014, 12:43:05 PM
Sure! Just remember. You can do anything you set your mind to! :)


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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 15, 2014, 12:43:47 PM
That is true but...that song came from a song so its odd ya know?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tyga on April 15, 2014, 12:45:32 PM
we'll call it a "cover" and go from there
Title: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: nixon/monto on April 15, 2014, 12:46:21 PM
A lot of great bands started out doing covers and then they made their own music. Most people see what they can do but never truly embrace it
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 15, 2014, 12:47:32 PM
True true....i can work with that...just need a song someone likes and i have to work around it is all lol
Title: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: nixon/monto on April 15, 2014, 12:51:21 PM
You have a gameplan, that'd great!
I'm going to class. See you guys in a few hours
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 15, 2014, 12:53:40 PM
C ya nix






The more i think about it....most songs are poems put to music correct??
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Post by: nixon/monto on April 15, 2014, 04:04:25 PM
Right! So your songs will be...(as the doctor says.) brilliant!


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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 15, 2014, 04:06:43 PM
^^ Pretty much!


Lots of works are inspired by other works without being a copy or even a version.


Cool to do it 3rd wave style  B)
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 16, 2014, 03:16:58 AM
Trapped


Trapped inside this house all i can do is play
Looking all through the house only soldiers made of clay
Running down the halls each step splintering wood cracks behind me
The walls cracked and covered in mold and moss
I close the door creaking shut never to let me out again
Pounding can be heard in the room never to be opened again

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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 18, 2014, 03:03:26 AM
?????






Help one.....help another.....and another...
Help Me.....Help me....Help one.....and another
Never Me.....Only One.....and Another
Seldom Me.....Another....And One
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 18, 2014, 03:06:43 AM
Seldom > never, therefore improvement! :)


 :?
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 18, 2014, 03:28:43 AM
hmmm? ?
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 30, 2014, 02:58:36 AM

The Pain


I act a fool to take away your pains, tripping and falling
Only adding to my pains afraid to allow someone inside
Whipping away your tears adding to my own, creating only pain
I put myself behind the rest
But that's okay it's alright, the pain i bear with others is my satisfaction
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Post by: Tim Siguire on April 30, 2014, 04:53:43 AM
Heart touching! Me like! *Hugs*
You are good with capturing things in a small poem.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 30, 2014, 05:01:41 AM
Thanks :3*Hugs*
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 30, 2014, 03:33:07 PM
This makes me sad  :'(


Which is the mark of a good poem
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 30, 2014, 03:59:01 PM
Im sorry :(

I hate makingothers sad
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Post by: nixon/monto on April 30, 2014, 06:57:19 PM
Sadness is temporary. Friends should be forever. I made an oath that I would try my best to not leave you guys because you are my friends, all of you! Don't leave me and I won't leave you! Please? (I've had too many leave me. I don't think I could take it again. ;( )
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 01, 2014, 03:21:17 AM
We womt leave you nix i promise
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 07, 2014, 02:20:11 AM
The Darkness




This darkness envelops my mind in bereavement and misfortune
Eating me alive each second, putting on a smile every where I go
Lynching myself slowly working it's way out, the intention becoming real
As i sit here continuously delving deeper into the darkness i can not stop
As i fall deeper into seclusion I smile harder to hide it all away
All alone i hold on so no one else is pained.
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Post by: MaskaTheOtter on May 07, 2014, 03:13:24 AM
Awwww Jolly *hugs* I have been there before
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 07, 2014, 03:36:08 AM
Havent we all?
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Post by: MaskaTheOtter on May 07, 2014, 04:12:39 AM
Very true... some more than others... *still hugging*
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 07, 2014, 04:20:40 AM
*Hugs tighy* and some deeper than others
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Post by: MaskaTheOtter on May 07, 2014, 04:44:07 AM
*whimpers a bit* well it is good to know that there are good friends out there to help you through the rough times
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 07, 2014, 04:57:05 AM
so far atm You, Peace, and Grey
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Post by: MaskaTheOtter on May 07, 2014, 05:00:08 AM
well we are great friends and we are always here for you
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 07, 2014, 05:09:08 AM
mmhm :3
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Post by: Tyga on May 07, 2014, 09:34:16 AM
You gave me feelz...mad feelz


Hope things get better J carry on carrying on.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 07, 2014, 12:43:41 PM
Thanks Tyga


ill try.....
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Post by: Tyga on May 07, 2014, 12:47:08 PM
Hey bud, if you need a shoulder you know where i am
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 07, 2014, 12:49:25 PM
I'll be sure to find ya.....*Hugs Tyga and Maska*
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Post by: Tyga on May 07, 2014, 01:19:08 PM
~hugs jolly~ My door is always open
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 07, 2014, 01:52:41 PM
:3 *Nod lightly* Thanks
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Post by: Grey on May 07, 2014, 07:19:38 PM
These are all very good. Nice work on these, Jolly.
Remember to come to us if something's giving you grief.

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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 07, 2014, 07:28:51 PM
Thanks :3 and i will
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on May 08, 2014, 04:55:44 AM
Suffering poet
Takes the hurt upon himself
Fills his pen with pain
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 08, 2014, 05:12:52 AM
mmhm thats true
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on May 08, 2014, 05:40:34 AM
*Signs in blood*


:D
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 08, 2014, 11:04:51 AM
Huh? What ya doooooin?
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Post by: Tyga on May 08, 2014, 11:07:26 AM
she's stealing your soul...quick, RUN!
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 08, 2014, 05:42:18 PM
WAIT I HAVE A SOUL  :o
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on May 09, 2014, 07:34:43 AM
Not anymore :D


Ya snooze ya lose XD


You don't need to worry about souls Green, you're all heart :3
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 09, 2014, 01:04:45 PM
eh not Necessarily a good thing sometimes, in most situations yes lol
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 02, 2014, 08:52:55 PM
So quiet
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on June 02, 2014, 10:15:18 PM
It's too quiet...
 <.<
 >.>
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Post by: Tyga on June 02, 2014, 10:22:03 PM
We should have a party


A poem party!


~derails poor jolly's thread~
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on June 03, 2014, 12:43:26 PM
There once was a Jolly Green Fox
Whose doors did not have good locks
So in burst a party
And right from the start he
Was showered with poems and shocks
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Post by: NautilusWolf on June 04, 2014, 04:51:42 AM
In came Haden with a funny look,
In his hand did a grenade cook.
He let the pin drop,
Everyone did the flop,
The grenade burst to confetti,
And Haden overrode the thread for Jolly. X3
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Post by: Tyga on June 04, 2014, 06:23:59 AM
In walked a tiger, a smile on his face
Deciding to join in trashing the place
he danced and he flashed
Until we all crashed
We all here are pretty hardcase
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 05, 2014, 03:56:26 AM
There stood a fox astonished and awed
Dancing around with move always Flawed
He jumped and he sang
Then fell the lamp with a bang
All of us together, nothing better
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Post by: Tim Siguire on June 05, 2014, 04:22:35 AM
In the group was a Jackal
who let out friendly cackles.
By his friend he stood,
Jolly, he's all good.
And in the fun the Jackal spun
to the song who's main hero is sung.
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 09, 2014, 04:58:24 PM
Poem Parties are awesome :3
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on June 09, 2014, 05:08:07 PM
And that's no fake!
You'll get more than you can take!
I stop now for your sake...
*produces cake*
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 09, 2014, 06:46:48 PM
Is that cake a fake?
Could it be a lie?
....can we just have pie?
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on June 09, 2014, 06:55:07 PM
You say pie
I say gimme
Problem is
What about Timmy?
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 09, 2014, 07:06:22 PM
I think he maybe worried about a shimmy
but he wont go far
not in that car
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 10, 2014, 03:36:18 PM
As the darkness in my heart grows the light seems to fade
I rip and tear at my heart to remove the darkness that grows
The darkness slowly begins to Invade
I take a step into the light and soon the darkness flows
Into my heart the darkness locks it self away from the light
Into the grave i will take my darkness deep down into the earth
As i begin to rot and there i am soon but a distant memory in the night

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Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 25, 2014, 09:02:30 PM
i can not think of any happy poems lol i have no clue why
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Post by: NautilusWolf on June 26, 2014, 03:38:26 AM
As the darkness in my heart grows the light seems to fade
I rip and tear at my heart to remove the darkness that grows
The darkness slowly begins to Invade
I take a step into the light and soon the darkness flows
Into my heart the darkness locks it self away from the light
Into the grave i will take my darkness deep down into the earth
As i begin to rot and there i am soon but a distant memory in the night


That. Was. DEEP.


What I got from it is that someone olds a grudge, but can't get past it or it's a symbolism for depression. My thoughts lie with the depression. Loved it!
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Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 26, 2014, 06:33:32 PM
Thanks, kinda wish they were a little more lighter ya know lol
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Post by: Trixsie Vixen on June 26, 2014, 06:48:02 PM
Maybe you need to be given a topic to write to Green?


Try 'watching your lady sleep'.  It's classic. :D
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 26, 2014, 06:52:19 PM
whats that???
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on June 26, 2014, 07:04:11 PM
What, you've never watched your gf while she sleeps?


That's poem material right there! :D
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: saph the sergal on June 26, 2014, 07:05:56 PM
That's not creepy at all trixsie

Sent from my C1504

Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 26, 2014, 07:38:56 PM
I have but i normally fall asleep with her lol
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on June 27, 2014, 12:10:54 AM
That's not creepy at all trixsie


LOL, this doesn't even get in the door of Trixsie's World of Creepy XD

Aerosmith and Leonardo's Bride have both touched on the subject. 

But I reckon Jolly can do better than those hacks!
*puts faith in Jolly*

But maybe you need a topic that speaks to you Green?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: SadDubwool on June 27, 2014, 12:16:29 AM
I've never seen this much talent and heart put into poems...Jolly you are truly the most genius writer i have ever seen~Jacob
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 27, 2014, 04:13:03 AM
Thanks :3...Theres more talent in books than here, and none of these would ever make a book, or even close
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: SadDubwool on June 27, 2014, 04:32:10 AM
Dont doubt yourself,you could do anything if you belive in yoursel ^_^ f


(I know thats a cliché method of being great at stuff but it works well)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 27, 2014, 04:40:01 AM
Ehhh.... if i had a graph of how much i believe in myself it would be this






|         X
|         X
|         X
|X       X
|_________
 Jolly  Avg person
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on June 28, 2014, 11:04:08 AM
Trust to the vixen who's always believed in you! :3

You have a great voice, people would go wild for your work if you could get it out there!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: SadDubwool on June 28, 2014, 11:19:59 AM
yes believe in your self and can accomplish anything
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 28, 2014, 02:42:44 PM
I have an idea... Maybe stupid but what if someone  draws a picture to the poems?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on June 29, 2014, 06:32:24 AM
Your graph is impressive enough for me. At least you have belief.
You may not make a book, but it fits great in a letter, card, short story, and a few other things!
Even in an English Book. You're illustrious poems have great ability, emotion, and meaning.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on June 29, 2014, 02:16:06 PM
Very very little belief
heck if they went anywhere I would be surprised
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on July 26, 2014, 02:43:10 PM
*hugs* you need to stay positive bro
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on July 29, 2014, 12:06:51 AM
Ehhh.... if i had a graph of how much i believe in myself it would be this






|         X
|         X
|         X
|X       X
|_________
 Jolly  Avg person


Just this graph:  AWESOME!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: MaskaTheOtter on July 29, 2014, 06:35:32 PM
^good point. that is a really creative graph^
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on August 18, 2014, 07:15:35 PM
Thanks lol, ive been up so late most nights >.< till about 2:30 3:00am idky
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on September 04, 2014, 01:04:55 AM
Did you know your writing thread has the second highest amount of replies in the writing threads Jolly?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on September 04, 2014, 01:40:54 AM
Yeah i know :3 and its exciting
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on September 04, 2014, 01:59:02 AM
Oooh!  Excited Jolly is my favourite ;)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on September 04, 2014, 02:02:39 AM
YAY :3
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: CanzetYote on October 18, 2014, 05:12:53 PM
On a dreary night as the snow fell vastly across the land nothing visible but the wall of white and the dull lulling lights of the city in the distance, As the Fox walked bundled up in a heavy coat, paws in his pockets with an Olive green duffle bag hanging off of one shoulder and balaclava covering all but his eyes. His eyes watery from being hit by the flurry of snow attacking his body. The snow packed under his scuffed up brown combat boots. As the path seems to get longer and longer the Fox pulls his light brown paws out of his jacket whipping his delicate dazzling Green cat like eyes gently, no cars in sight only the the lights of the city in slumber.


(I will work on more but so far with do you think?)


The walk seemed to only drag on, the lights not moving closer but further away. The Fox walked on the crunching sound of the snow packing down sent vibrations from his boots to his spine, the cold winds whisper wrapping snow around his body as he shivers. Small dots of red follow the fox as he walks, appearing drop by drop behind him. The Fox continued walking hearing the sound of a vehicle driving he swung around his tail still in front of him as he turned, but there was no vehicle in sight. He turned around slowly to see a wolf in front of him. A puff of steamy breath comes from the wolf ask he speaks "What are you doing out here in this cold" The fox remained silent and nodded. The wolf was wearing a long overcoat with a few holes in it, His pants were thick Olive green and his boots covered in mud. The wolf walked behind the fox and before the fox could turn around he was gone, no footprints left, no sign.


The fox sighed exhaling a puff of steam. The wolf looked familiar but he could not name the wolf, soon the fox began walking again his steps beginning to get slower. He looked up to see a sign on the road dimly lit saying "INN", the fox walked up to the inn and looked around, no cars, no people, just a building with all the windows busted out as if people wanted to escape, there was only one room with the windows intact. The door was cracked open slightly with the light on. The fox walked in and announced "Is anyone Here" the fox heard nothing and closed the door, The fox walked back into the bathroom and jumped in surprise griping his chest. In the tub was the wolf he saw earlier, He had cuts all over his body blood flowing out of each cut. The Fox quickly put his finger on the wolfs neck checking for a pulse but null there was none. The fox sighed and shook his head looking at the wolfs body seeing a dog tag, he fell to his knees and grab it quickly, looking at it closely, it read "David Goliath......1st Tank Battalion".


The fox begun to tear up and fall to his knees clenching the dog tags, tears falling from his muzzle down onto the dog tags and the floor. The fox took a steady and slow deep breath and as he stood his knees weak he mustered a small voice and the word "Brother" came out in a sweet soothing gruff voice. Looking at the body the fox pulled a blanket out of his duffle bag and covered the body and shed some more tears running down his muzzle, gasping for a breath. As he walked away from the body he looked around the room, The King sized bed's covers were gone and the bed itself was covered in dry blood, looking at the desk in the room covered in dust it had a note but the writings were chicken scratch and covered in dried blood. The fox Ran out of the room crying falling his back to the wall in the snow uncontrollably sobbing as the snow wiped his eyes, Soon the fox regain composure and punched out the windows to the room from the outside his hand bleeding from the glass shards dripping into the snow and turning the flakes around his hand red with blood, The fox begun to walk again still tears roll down his muzzle into the snow and it whips across his face.

Aww....that poor Fox. I wish I could just hug him during the scene where he was crying. Anyway, I have a few questions regarding that scene:

1. What exactly is the fox's name?

2. When the fox was crying, were his tears specifically rolling:
A: Down the bridge of his muzzle and collecting at the tip of his nose as he hangs his head
or
B: Down the side of his muzzle, past his lips and onto his jaw

3. Exactly how would the fox react and what would he say to me if I hugged him, massaged his back and licked those tears rolling down his muzzle with my tongue? Because whenever I read that part where he cries, I fantasize licking every last tear rolling down that fox's muzzle.

I hope these questions aren't too weird and I would love it if you could answer back!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on November 18, 2014, 10:32:52 PM

Throes of life

As the tears roll down my cheek my Anguish deepens
Anguish hidden behind my counterfeit smile
The contusions buried underneath my clothes
As my Anguish heightens that counterfeit smile weakens
My smile is all but a ruse nothing more than a guile
Fighting back against my life full of throes

Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on November 19, 2014, 12:27:25 AM
My friend could feel this poem & relate to it!


So emotionally capturing as always Jolly.  *Big Hug*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on November 19, 2014, 08:41:31 AM
Thanks :3


*Hugs* i wonder if anyone has ever used these in school lol would end badly i bet
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on November 19, 2014, 07:35:45 PM
Hmmm, this one's got me thinking.  *ponders*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on November 19, 2014, 09:38:43 PM
About what?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on November 20, 2014, 12:23:31 AM
Throes of course! XD



Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on November 20, 2014, 03:43:23 PM
OF COURSE lol
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on November 20, 2014, 04:03:49 PM
I'm also curious if CanzetYote got all her questions answered.  An inquiring mind is a beautiful thing.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on November 20, 2014, 06:40:33 PM
I pmed her bit never got a reply :(
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on November 20, 2014, 06:45:45 PM
Hey your thread is approaching Y2K!


*alarm and panic*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on November 20, 2014, 09:17:43 PM
Meh lol :3
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on November 21, 2014, 05:04:37 AM
*Tackle with a soft landing*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on November 21, 2014, 05:42:37 AM
*hugs while on the ground* Hi Tim :3
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on November 21, 2014, 05:44:36 AM
Hai... :3
How izz, you?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on November 21, 2014, 05:52:06 AM
Grounded by you atm other wise good lol :3 hbu
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on November 21, 2014, 05:59:09 AM
Im good. tired alot & a bit sad. Still good though. ^_^
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on November 21, 2014, 06:01:17 AM
Ah that seems like no fun anyway i can help?
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on November 21, 2014, 06:12:52 AM
Nah, it's all fine. It's nothing serious.


*cuddles* it's wierd & awkward but I just want a hug from someone.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on November 21, 2014, 06:47:20 PM
*Hugs* that's I can do
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 15, 2014, 04:21:45 PM
Im going to try and start a new story....not ganna get very far again....but wth right lol
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on December 16, 2014, 12:30:27 PM
Yay! I'll be waiting for it's every chapter lol
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on December 16, 2014, 07:27:24 PM
Okay :)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 09, 2015, 09:42:44 PM

Chapter 1
Peace Before The Storm
The Season was Fall, The leave had begun to change little did I know, I was changing too. I woke up that morning with a feeling of dread, that's not unusual for me, at least this year. I had started at a new school, This school was known as a Hybrid school or in other terms it was a mix between humans and Anthros. OH! I completely for got to introduce myself my name is Kazimir Gerasimov, This could be another reason they don't like me. My family is from Russia but I am 3 generations out from being Russian only the name is. Whelp let me start where i can remember from. It was a few years ago, seems silly saying years it feels like it's been weeks but it hasn't been. It all started out heading to school with a friend of mine, damn if i cant remember her name, But what she looked like I can tell you in a heart beat. She had fur black as midnight, with the greenest eyes I have ever seen, her hair brown as bark on a tree with bangs long enough to hide one eye. Her body had some meat on it, just the way i liked it. She had a way about her that was...um....well intriguing. She was open and very loud but when it came down to it she was very calm and caring....wish i could remember more. Anyway it was a cold winter day, so cold in fact my fur was about to freeze right off my tail. We got into school and there were plenty of humans and Anthros everywhere running, walking, and talking. I didn't play much attention i went to class. The room was empty all but me and other other student. He was a Human Male, Kept to himself in the corner, a few times i would catch him watching my tail wave and sway. (i'll post this see what yall think and maybe do more...been sick for almost a month.....i should go to the doctors but na....idk why)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on January 09, 2015, 09:47:58 PM
This must be it. Yay!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on January 09, 2015, 09:56:26 PM
some of it lol
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on January 13, 2015, 01:47:43 PM
Nice.  Something different for you Jolly?


Also, get to the doctors silly fox!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: mistermayday on February 18, 2015, 12:58:17 AM
I know this topic is a little old but didn't want to make a new one so here's a short story I've been working on:The night sky glistens with a radiance seldom seen anywhere else. One can just stare at it forever... But then morning comes, and the light obscures my darkness. And then I wait, until I may see the beauty painted upon our sky like a masterful painter can only try to recreate. And then, a smile will cross my face, and all I can think of is others, even in such a solitary state all by myself. That is what I dedicate my life to. The souls who appear to me when the light fades. Sometimes I wonder why I was ever put on this earth. Then I look at that moon and I remember. For them. For them, I would die. It doesn't matter if I hardly know them. In the end, my happiness comes from their happiness and well being. And when I can no longer serve them, my night sky will take me in it's loving caress. And it will whisper to me as It does symbolically every night. Then I will close my eyes and that same smile will cross my face. "goodnight"
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 10, 2015, 09:14:40 PM

Rising Up

As Darkness Besieges us like cattle
Many stand somber enveloped in this bleak fog
Others fall to the oppression of these demons
Few ascend through the fog and above the demonic figures
Those who ascend realize one thing
WE ARE THOSE DEMONS.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on April 10, 2015, 10:21:01 PM
*pounce hugs the ball of fur* Jolly Jolly Jolly ol Green Fox!
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 11, 2015, 01:28:34 PM
Who are you calling a demon?  >:3


*hides pitchfork*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 11, 2015, 05:28:55 PM
Hi there Tim lol, what are ya up too, and we are all demons honestly
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on April 11, 2015, 05:33:28 PM
I can relate.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on April 13, 2015, 03:09:55 AM
Last month and this month have been HELL
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on April 13, 2015, 03:37:56 AM
You made it through though. You can do it. Believe.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on April 30, 2015, 03:06:36 PM
Jolly makes it sound bad but he's been a champion IMHO.


Legendary fox is legendary  B)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 08, 2015, 01:25:51 PM
As light looms in the distance we stand tall
Above all else we hear the call
we stand ready to fight for all that we love
we wait ready for that final shove
it decides the end and the beginning.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Trixsie Vixen on May 08, 2015, 03:28:28 PM
Bravo!! *applauds*
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on May 11, 2015, 02:36:37 AM
Hey, guess who is online? You, Jolls! I have been in a nicknamey mood for some reason.
Your poems thread is still holding high. ^_^
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 11, 2015, 05:37:30 AM
How im not sure lol
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 13, 2015, 09:23:32 PM
As light creeps away from Our soul
And Darkness creeps into our hearts
our mind will slowly lose control
This is how its starts
Forgetting what we stand for and why
The morals we hold near and dear
Lost amongst the terror and fear
we lose ourselves to the darkness and can never regain the light no matter how hard we try.






Remembering who we are is the most important thing in the world....to me it is at least
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: sketchyVagrant on May 13, 2015, 11:40:03 PM
Hey Jolly. These two up here ^^^ are great. I think it's difficult to write about one's own dark side and make it relatable: too specific and you have a confessional. Too vague and it's just like, "What?"  But you have a knack for finding that middle ground where the reader ( or at least myself ) can visualize what you're writing about, but still plug themselves and their own experience into it. Keep up the good work :3
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 16, 2015, 03:24:15 AM
We bring the darkness
We cause the pain
With no one but ourselves
Only us to blame.


Bathroom 11:24pm thought
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: nixon/monto on May 19, 2015, 11:11:00 AM
Pain,
All we feel is pain, in our hearts and on our brain. We feel the hurt and point out blame as if it gets us moved away. Happiness and struggle are the same, in reality it is to stay.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 19, 2015, 12:45:13 PM
Very nice :3
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: nixon/monto on May 19, 2015, 12:49:12 PM
Thanks :)
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 19, 2015, 01:09:44 PM
How long have you been writin? g
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: nixon/monto on May 19, 2015, 02:00:03 PM
Not long. I do more philosophical thought then I do poems or stories.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on May 19, 2015, 02:28:53 PM
Hmm I see.... Most of mine are dark poems
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: CanzetYote on April 30, 2016, 08:35:12 PM
I'm also curious if CanzetYote got all her questions answered.  An inquiring mind is a beautiful thing.


Just so you know, I'm male.
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 01, 2017, 10:55:37 PM

When light fails to shine through the canopy of life
The darkness spreads to all but the small slivers of light
Those Slivers of light can slowly become an item of wonder
Quickly darkness comes to envelop the light and make your remember
Darkness is King
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: Tim Siguire on March 01, 2017, 10:57:49 PM
JOLLY!! ALL HAIL MLORD AND DARKNESS HIMSELF.


FOR YOUR LIGHT WILL NEVER REACH HIS HEART LIKE HIS WIFES


WAHAZZ UP
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: JollyGreenFox on March 01, 2017, 11:20:19 PM
JOLLY!! ALL HAIL MLORD AND DARKNESS HIMSELF.


FOR YOUR LIGHT WILL NEVER REACH HIS HEART LIKE HIS WIFES


WAHAZZ UP


Hey there, Nm just stopping by lol been so busy
Title: Re: Some Poems And Maybe A Story
Post by: CanzetYote on May 21, 2018, 06:49:07 PM
Also, I have a couple more questions about Ivan's tears:



1. Dumb question but on a scale from 1 to 10 with 10 being the saltiest, how salty would Ivan's tears taste on my tongue if I licked them directly from his muzzle?


2. On a scale from 1 to 10 with 1 being freezing cold and 10 being scalding hot, how warm were those tears rolling down Ivan's muzzle?


Please reply back!