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Title: hey check out this poem
Post by: NiryxTheDragon on February 06, 2007, 11:06:14 PM
i just want to point out im not emo or goth and i can only write good emoish poems

                                                                   THE EMPTY FEELING

every heart beat is a call of agony from my screamign soul that is pitched in forever darkness from the world around it, a seavered limb of my personality and  an emptyness that cannot be filled. the hole is like an empty box never to be closed until it is filled. every blow is a stab wound in my soul, leaking out who i am and why i exist until i am nothing but a shell of my former self. a shadow of my immage that once was.                                                                                                                        crule life takes its cold hard hands and strangles the life out of you. i am but a puppet and life the master, pulling on my emotions as if strings to my heart.
 life is a mystery that we try and understand, but it is only an illusion of wich we cannot comprehend. life can be a dream or a night mare, but in the end either way you wake up, some sooner then others. we dream , wake up, and dream again, it is the circle of the way of life. out lives have no meaning, we have many questions but no way to answer them. thus concluding, THE EMPTY FEELING!


post any that you have and leave comments
Title: Re: hey check out this poem
Post by: BlackwidowX745 on February 07, 2007, 02:49:57 AM
sorry me no like it XD
Title: Re: hey check out this poem
Post by: NiryxTheDragon on February 07, 2007, 10:56:26 AM
ah its ok im not really into dark and all that i just cant write a decent love poem...
 >:|
Title: Re: hey check out this poem
Post by: Goblin Cat 😸 on February 07, 2007, 12:04:26 PM
I think it's good.  :upupdi3:
Title: Re: hey check out this poem
Post by: Arjuna on February 14, 2007, 04:29:10 AM
 :) I liked it, I think it's very nice.
Title: Re: hey check out this poem
Post by: WingedZephyr on February 23, 2007, 12:49:03 AM
It's good, nice use metaphors and whatnot, but not very original. Not that all of mine are or anything either  :P
Title: Re: hey check out this poem
Post by: Rhakshi on February 23, 2007, 02:15:22 AM
it was so-so, i'm not really one for poems.