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Creative Arts and Media => Creative Writing => Topic started by: Manual_automation on December 10, 2008, 04:05:25 AM
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*pokes thread* hmm.... so.... can i post some poetry here?
*fiddles with my keyboard* lets see if i can churn something out ^.^
The world continues it's constant spin
For some in this place the day's yet to begin
The ones we know of the ones we forget
They bleed sweat and die, our lives they protect
These brave, these stupid
These strong and these weak
They stand post for us, day and night sun or sleet
We wish them our best
We send them along
But never forget
To them our safety belongs
O.o hmm.... i could do better... it's about the military and the police, all over the world, not just in the U.S.A.
Oh, btw, i write this stuff as i go, i never know what it will be about untill i make up the first line, so forgive the 'first draft' aspect of everything
We play our games
We live our lives
We say eachothers names
We tell eachother lies
We pretend not to care
We say it doesn't matter
We know it's not true
We pretend not to be flattered
We know the truth
We need the approval
We seek the feeling
We want our pain's removal
Meh... i guess that one was about always needeing to feel accepted O.o that wasn't what i was going for when i started lol
i'll post more and maybe a short story if anyone thinks it's worth the time, and critisism is welcome ^.^ (BTW, i know i spelled stuff wrong, so sue me, i don't have spell check and can't open another window or this POS will crash >.< )
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VERY NICE for just off the top of your head...
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Ill have to say I liked the second one, nice job
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Thanks guys ^.^ glad you like it
This is me, a clean slate
And empty shell
A blank state of mind.
I'm not a god of any man
I'll never be a devil of the land
Not an angel with feathered wing
Nor a deamon or evil being.
I am myself
A neutral man
Never alone
Here I stand.
I can be anything you say
I can begin anew every day.
If I so choose i could be pure and good
Or if I felt like it evil and misconstrued.
I have the spark of divine light and peace
And deep within even the devil I could replace.
But when i get there i'll no longer be a man.
Be it devil or god, i will be changed.
hmm.... er... anywhoo.... i think i mean that i'm not really a good or bad guy, but if i want to, i could be a saint, or on the other hand, i could be the next Hitler with no trouble...... i guess it's good that i'm too lazy to try for one or the other lol
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nice job andre, i like reading this stuff. keep it up (i can't writepoetry for my life)
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Thanks guys ^.^ glad you like it
This is me, a clean slate
And empty shell
A blank state of mind.
I'm not a god of any man
I'll never be a devil of the land
Not an angel with feathered wing
Nor a deamon or evil being.
I am myself
A neutral man
Never alone
Here I stand.
I can be anything you say
I can begin anew every day.
If I so choose i could be pure and good
Or if I felt like it evil and misconstrued.
I have the spark of divine light and peace
And deep within even the devil I could replace.
But when i get there i'll no longer be a man.
Be it devil or god, i will be changed.
hmm.... er... anywhoo.... i think i mean that i'm not really a good or bad guy, but if i want to, i could be a saint, or on the other hand, i could be the next Hitler with no trouble...... i guess it's good that i'm too lazy to try for one or the other lol
i love reading your your stuff now^^
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Very good. A fresh poet for the sharks. :3
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oh joy, sharks lol xP
*giggles and grinns*
I'm up I'm out I'm on my way
I'm gone to meet another day
This time I'm gone, I'm off to play
I'm out of my mind, temporarily insane
My cool and calm ways down the drain
I'm gonna start something, I'm gonna fight
I'm gonna be gone and up all night
We're out of here, we're gonna party
Just shut up and pass the bacardi
Don't look for me, I'm already gone
The sound of insanity is my theme song!
yeah, i'm a little out of it from the massive amount of tabacco i've smoked and being so hyped up ca's it's 8 days till christmas break <.< and on new years i'm gonna party ^.^
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OI THAT JUNK IS BAD FOR YOO SPIT IT OUUTT *sorry if i post stuff like that when i'm exagerated i talk like that)
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what stuff?
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tobacco. Don't mess with that. And alcohol isn't much better.
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lol, i'm gonna die eventually enyway xD
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YA BUT ... nm nm if thats the way you want to live i have no right to change you, sorry for yelling
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it's fine, if you want to yell away, i'll listen
(I don't just ignore what friends have to say even if it's directed at something i do)
EDIT:
Sometimes i wish i could just walk away
Shed my skin and begin anew for another day
Live my life with another face
Let myself just vanish without a trace
I want to change
I want to be different
If i could go i'd do it
Run away to my new home
And begin my life.... my new soul found...
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Very, very good. I look forward to more.
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Here he is again, his day in a backwards spin
This time he's lost, no way to go
The world has a sinister glow, what he'll do nobody can know
The edge is near, coming up fast
He's going over, this time it's real
Time slows as he starts the process
Then he stops, the music plays
The vibrations of song, the rythm of the guitar
Like a drug it enters his body, his brain stops
The world straightens out, slowly becoming real
He begins to move, his body reacting
The fear is gone, the anger subsided
Sadness and pain melt away, the music has him now
And it's his life in his hands, the music is the key
He moves on, ready to go another round
The music brings him back to life........
<.< yes, i like music, it helps me alot, and i've been without my Zune for like a week, i'm so glad to have it back >.<