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Creative Arts and Media => Creative Writing => Topic started by: PhantomStone on November 04, 2008, 03:29:24 PM
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well this is like my first writing hing here, so if it's bad fine, w/e, i'm gonna start it off, basically this is based off the tabl top rpg shadowrun, i got the good bad and furry from this game, and now i'm gonna try my hand at writing a story about it, like i said i'm bored and this is my fist time writing anything thats going on the comp. or anywhere, so i'll wing it, i think this is gonna hav a few adventures of this shadowrunning team
"wooooo hoooo" wolfy shouted gunning it on his harley while shooting at lone star hot on his tail, he and his team were just finishing wet work (assasination) and accomplished it nicley, but gett our friendly neighbor hood techno mancer troll, sliped up and the alarm was triggered, and lone star came a running.
"huuu this will be easy" gett smirks drifting around a turn, he was the best driver we had, it felt good to know that he could handle a car
"guys focus" uschi osa shouted from her racing bike, weilding an uzi trying to keep some lone star back. th lone star police cruser was taking damage fast, soon it would crash, and they would get away fast, but unfortunitaly when she looked ahead and saw a lone star riot veichle, blocking there route to safety she swore and shouted "FAMOUS LAST WORDS GETT" as she tilted her motor bike crazily swerving into an alley way, grimacing as she heard getts car grind against the sides of the alley following her and wolfy
"jake we need an evac, now" uschi shouted into her comm link, checking behind her and seeing a new police cruser following them into the alley way
"dude you are driving, i can't get you guys yet, i'm still at the hide out" jake said frowning getting his hover craft out favoring his leg, in the last run lone star got a shot in on him "it will take time" he said getting into the craft and starting i up this thing was used for personal pick up, not veichle flying "plan pick up omega" he asked
"looks like we have no other option" she said looking a head as a lone star cruser pulled up the other end of the alley, blocking it off, they were trapped "thanks gett, YOU HAD TO SAY IT"
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Nice, keep it up. Not bad at all for a first time really
Oh and I should say, you might wanna change "assination" to "Assasination" :P
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thank you tezzor i'll fix that :peace:
uschi slams on her braks knowing wolfy he'd be on the right "let me be right" she wispered swerving to the left and letting gett pass her and wolfy, then she sped up, drafting behind getts car, the moment before impact she yanked up on her handle bars and rolled over get's car as it gets slowled by the police cruser, she rolls over the cruser too and drives into the street cricling around the lone stars trying to be a distraction
gett powrs up the ca by adding nos, pushing th totaled cruser out of the way and drifting around the turn, and gunning it out of there, calling wolfy and uschi "hey guys get away plan alpha" he said calmly
uschi heard him and sped up away from the lone stars going the opposite way as gett, tossing some chemical baloons at the cops, and sped away, as fast as she could
wolfy jumped right over the cop cars speeding off in a third rout, tossin a diffrent chemical ballon behind him and speedig off as he hears the chemicals combine and explode, causeing chaos behind him, as her spead to the slums
uschi called jake "plan alpha" she relayed driving off to the slums, as she heard a confirmation from jake, hearing the hovor craft fire up in the back ground, turning off all the lights to her bike, and engaging the silencer she drove to the slums
gett, driving the biggest veichle had a bit of a hard time getting away, he spent over 10 minutes just to put some distance between the crusers and him "come on man, just a few more minutes till we can meet up" he wispered half of his attention on drivin and on scrambling lone stars comm links and directions from higher ups
uschi drove allong, just as the time specifyed was almost up a lone cruser pulled up and cut her off, "awww came on!" she yelled swerving into another alley, and almost to the extraction point
wolfgang almost smiled when he reached the extraction point as the same time as his friends, but he didn't when he saw the hovor craft was no where in sight, "jake hurry up" he yelled skidding around gett who drifted around uschi, as uschi tossed gernades at the lone stars
"hey LONE STAR" jake yelled over the loud speaker on the craft as her hit the singnal, dropping nades and fog devises, totally shourding the square, as his team got lowered by the hydrolic lift in the center of the square
uschi stoped once she flt her self being lowered into the ground a sec. later jake flew in and the roof closed. they had built this place a while ago, only known about by her team, she sighed as the lift touched bottom and the lights came on, revealing there lower hide out, a large cavernous room, big enough for the teams veichles, and for them to stay, the big 700 lbs bear stood up and walked over to the couch and sat down laughing
jake limped out hover craft, the only human in the group, and started laughing too, sat down by uschi
wolfy the fox of the group parked his bike and smiled he almost never laughed but he smiled and opened up some soy and eat som of it
gett opened the car door and laughed with the rest of the troop, he was a troll, in this world trolls, and elf's and dwarves, and orcs were just as comon as human here in seattle, the furry folk like uschi and wolfgang were a lot raerer, but not inheard of, thenks to the SURGE (a magical out sweep that transformed some ppl giving them animal looks and qualities) they were looked down upon, but who wasn't, the trolls and orcs looked down upon the elves for being diffrent and beautiful, humans and some elf's looked down upon trolls and orcs because they were diffrent and ugly. and every one looked down upon dwarves, cause they were so short.
"ahhh, what a way to end the week" wolfy said opening a can and holding it up
"hey we still have jobs to do man" uschi said smiling and clinking her own can with wolfy
"we got time" jake said laughing clinking his own can
"hey" gett said clinking cans with every body
"what" ushi asked her bro
"i told ya it would be easy"
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First off, Im gonna say the story isn't bad at all, has a nice action feel to it.
However I feel for your benefit I'm going to point out a few things that can help you when you try to write stories.
1) Capitol Letters at the beggining of sentences, as well as names.
2) Better sentence structure, some of them tend to drag on like you're chatting on a messenger.
3) Try to limit how many times you use "And" in your sentences. Split it up into new sentences if you have to. It will give your story a cleaner presentation.
Other then that it's a good effort, the story is there you just need to work on the delivery a bit.
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Awesome job bear. I Love it. Keep up the good work.
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thanks tezzor, all my teachers get on my bak for run on sentances, i'm getting better every time i write (i hope) also i'm writing this as it comes to me so srry if it lacks editing like some other peices
thanks for the kudos wolfy (good luck at the hearing man, we're routing for ya)
uschi took a deep breath "so now we have to collect our payment, don't we" she maoned. she was big and tall, she was the teams wheel girl, gunbunny, and demolitions dudette.
"hey what fun is getting chased by the cops if u don't follow up" gett smiled standing up to his full 7' 3". he was prety big even by troll standards, also weighing in at 300 pounds makes him a bit of a heavy weight. gett's jub was the hacker and gillet (street samurai, meta humans who have cyber implants and are very fast far beyond normal meta human speed.) his favorit weapons are his katanas.
"well lets get going" wolfgang said not moving. wolfy was more of a dark charactor,he is our infiltration speciliast and out sorta wheel man and gun bunny
"hey im comming, like u could get the right price without me" jake smiled and winced as he got up. he was our sniper/ rigger/ face. he basicaly shot from out of the building or from behind a drone, and he was the guy who made sure we could get the price we wanted
"well we can't get our nyunen (the type of money in the 6th world) just siting here" uschi said checking over her gear and hopping on her bike. while gett and jake got into the hovor craft. and wolfy hopped onto his hearly gunning the engine. the lift started to rise, once they reached the street, they drove off, keeping in touch with there commlinks "ok meet at the BOUNCERS BASEMENT" she said sounding off the place where they will meet their employer.
"on it" her team answered as they drove off.
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once the team reached the bar, they looked around and saw a clear coast and walked in. uschi and wolfy deep in there trench coats, in a place where there were drunk trolls and orcs every where, and this was seattle, and every one thought the furry were insuperier to the other meta humans it's not a good idea to stand out and have furry pride.
gett stood near jake as he walked to the back room. hopefully any right minded troll or orc, would not mess with gett. after sometalking to the right people, jake signlled the fox man and bear girl tofollow him into a back room, where their employer was waiting for them.
as jake and gett walked in first they saw there mr. jhonson a small oily dwarf. as they sat down uschi and wolfy followed by jhonsons body guards, and sat down looking at the dwarf from under there hoods
"lets get down to business, jhonson" jake started out casually uschi had to stifeld a groan. this would be a boring night, she hated negotiations, nothing happened to her, unlike a fire fight or such, so she relaxed waiting for jake to roll in the nuyen and get us out of here. but like every tthing else in the 6th world nothing goes to plan... (tbc)
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Nice, I always love character development.
Oh and I hope you didn't take what I said personal. The only real way for any artist to improve is for others to give them critique.
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lol i didn't take it personaly, how would getting upset about true things get to make me a better writer, sides i think that stuff you said made my writing a little better
"why thankyou mr. jhonson" jake said politly amazing how he and jhonson could be in a heated disscussion, at the point of yelling, yet he can still pull off what we need.
"good day" the jhonson said through gritted teeth, he didn't have the charm jake did. with that we got up and walked out, once we reached the bigger, more crowded part of the bar, thats when trouble hit. over a few yards from us was Tag. he was a shadowrunner like them, but what he was doing here, with no sign of his team, was disturbing to say the least. so uschi walked over, the trench coat hood over her face obscuring her muzzle from others in the room.
"i'll have a beer" she said gruffly to the bar keep, who scurreyed away from the mencing figure, under the beat of the music she wispered to her friend "are you ok, where is yumi, or des, or locke?" she asked accepting her beer and taking a sip. looking out of the corner of her eye she saw tag start to shudder, like he was laughing. that ticked her off, a true friend wouldn't laugh about his friends not any where near him, they were a team "tag what is-" she stopped short, she turned tag around, he was crying and a strange collar was around his neck
just as uschi saw the collar, gett was getting shoved around by another big troll, he didn't want to start a fight, this guy was ovbiously a leader, and a lot of trolls would have his back, he singnaled to his team to leave, and he walked out. uschi grabbed a hold of tag and followed her team out. once they reached the outside, she pulled tag into a dark alley. she spun him around to look at him, but before she could say anything, his collar, a weird metal and light device about 1 inch in diameter, started to glow and a ticking noise occured. her eyes widened when she heard the sound and looked at the still sobbing human that was tag.
gett looked around for uschi, when he started to turn back, there was a blast of light from the alley way near him, he heard a human scream, and gasped as it gradually shifted into a rhinos bellow. at the same time, he heard a bears roar, shift into a falcons cry. when the lights died down, and the crying stoped he ran into the alley, followed by his team, just in time to see a small falcon and a taller rhino fall to the ground, uschi was no where to be seen. he looked at the falcon, and saw all of uschi's gear on her, he also remembered the crying roar he heard, and his eyes widened. he grabbed a hold of the falcon, at the same time wolfgang picked up the rhino and they got on there veichles and drove back to the hide out.
(now i'm done and i need a reply to go on, lol)
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Looks good to me. Sentence structure has Improved and its easier to read now definitely.
Keep up the good work
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thanks man
ghost started to open her eyes, shaking her self out of sleep she tried to get up, but realised she was strapped to the medical table. her black eyes widened, every thing looked white beyond the single light over head, in fact only the light looked dark to her. "tag, gett, wolfy, jake?" she wispered scared, thinking about the flash of light "tag... TAG" she yelled struggling trying to break out of the cables holding her to the table
gett and the rest of the team walked in and stared at the falcon "shut up" gett said roughly glaring at the falcon "who are you and what have you done to uschi and tag" he spat his hand on a taser
ghost looked around, at her self in particular, she wasn't her self anymore, "gett it's me" she said pleading with hr eyes at her older brother "remember all the times we got into trouble togeather" she said trying to convinse her brother "tag had a collar around his neck, there was a flash of liht and now i'm here, and every thing is white and black" she was babbling and scared
gett scowled at th falcon "how do we know its really you" ge growled taking out his taser and pointing it at ghost
"last year you got locked out of the house with out your keys and shoes and stuff cause donny beat you up, and i looked around for you, and that ganger almost took me away while i was looking for you, but u saved me and beat him up" she said not stopping. "and we just finised a run, and you said it was easy" she followed up. spouting things off as she rememberd them
gett's eyes went wide when he heard all this stuff, he unlocked his sister, and hugged her "what happened" he asked calm, letting ghost cry onto his shoulder, trying not to think about her eyes
ghost proceeded to tell him about everything that had happened that was in her knoledge "where's tag" she wispered finaly calm
gett looked her in the eyes and led he to another room, to see tag, chained up. ghost ran over to him before gett could shout a warning the rhino saw ghost and snarreled, he was crazy now, foam comming from his mouth, spitting and growling at the falcon stunned in front of the table as gett grabed a hold of his sister, taking her out of there
"whats wrong with him" she said on the verge of tears. she sat down on the couch, the rest of her team sitting around her hugging her like the big family they were. she was met by silence. she knew thay could only assume, that this had something to do with cedar krupp. the collar was still around tag, they couldn't get it off of him.
"you know once you get back on your feet we're going to make someone pay" wolfgang wispered, but in the silence the sound carried to the team. ghost closed her eyes, and fell asleep, letting the troubles of the day go away for a few hours untill she would begin her new life as phantom falcon. she would need a new SIN, a new licence, everything, tomarrow would be a long day.
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Keep it up, its coming alone well. The bear has become a falcon. I think that would put everybody on edge
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Awesome job. Keep them coming.
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thanks again tezzor lol
thanks wolfy
ghost opened her dark eyes scanning the room, taking in every detail. it has been a few weeks sense the alley way explosion, ghost had been training hard to ready hr self for the comming battle. she looked left just as a wooden cut out popped up from a crate and shot paint balls at her, she doged left rolling behind cover shooting back, splattering the last target. as the lights came on, she stood up and grimly nodded to jake, in charge of the training sims. "new high score" jake said approvingaly walking out and looking at his friend, barley covered by paint.
"thanks man" ghost smiled looking at the human following him out of the bigger training room to meet up with the rest of the team, having breakfast. tonight they would take ghost on her first run back, being smaller, having new powers, having wings, being faster took some getting used to, now that she had passed her training, the team could get down to business, following some leades on the collar. witch they had not been able to take off of tag. it seemed sense ghost was fine after the change, it probably was the collar that was making him crazy.
"do we have any leds" ghost asked grabbing a bowl of soy with flavor of a steak on it. and siting next to gett, her eyes were weird, no one on her team would meet them, even she didn't ant to look in the mirror and see the white orbs (for her, cause she sees in negative). she looked around, thinking about tag.
"we have to check out cedar krupps data base" jake said grabbing his own soy flavored like some chocolaty cereal. "they are most likely to be behind it, their tech has a specific singnature about it, and the collar reflects it"
"i'll take care of the data search" gett said finishing his soy and looking up "jake will go out and get a job from a jhonson at 36th and baker in the slums, in the dirty dwarf" he said naming a leasser known bar, cheap beer, and shoddy food, the perfect place for the slums lower meta humans.
"ok then we'll head out tonight" jake said smiling "uschi- i mean ghost" he correctd him self "there is some gear in the back tthat should work" he said nodding not looking her in the eye
"ok then we'll meet back here at 8" ghost said finishing her soy and walking int the back room picking out gear
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One word.
Grammar.
Like, capitalize the first letter of every sentence, capitalize the names, etc.
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hey i write cause i like to write, and i want to get better, comments help and, as long as u guys can understand it, i'm happy, i just want to get my story out, but if u don't like the way i write, fine (and i know i'm not using grammar, i do that on purpose lol)
ghost met back up with wolfy, and jake. gett was still glued to the couch. "really, does he even do what he says or is he just browsing dating or gaming sites" ghost asked strapping on her lined coat, while slinging on her sword, followed by an asult rifle and a pistol. jake had set up the contract over the matrix (c). we had to get inside a werehouse just out side of the slums and smash some gear desstined for lone star.
the jhonson was hired by the halloweeners (c) a seattle gang. we knew this cause while jake was talking up the elf in question, gett brok away from his task to hack jhonson's files. aparently the halloweeners were planning something, and lone star was not on the invite list.
"well we don't need him" wolfy said confadently, the plan so far was for ghost, and wolfy to slip in unoticed, taking jakes drone, wolfy and ghost would sabatouage all the gear, while the drone was keeping every thing in check, like NOT setting off the alarms. "like our gillet gett could ever sneak"
"is that so" gett said right behind wolfy, he had snuck up with out oru knowing. he laughed as wolfgang jumped, suprised "and i was working hard, i got to he data base, right now i got a sprite decrypting some files" (sprites are spirits in the matrix, technomancers like gett, can control the matrix with there mind, and can summon sprites to do there bidding) gett said smiling ruffling wolfys head fur
"pift and u call ure self sneakers" a automated voice said comming from a robotic lynx, jakes drone of choice, "really i'm made of metal, and i can sneak up on my tea--" he got cut off and gett wrapped a big meaty arm around the large cat robot, controled by there friend in the other room, probably miffed that his tech. was getting beaten by brawn.
"come on guys lets go" ghost said laughing at her friends, walking over to her bike. wolfgang smiled and followed, his tool kit strapped to his back. jake would stay here, and send his drone to work with ghost and wolfy. the drone shook it self out and ran into the night, ghost hopped on to her bike and followed the steel cat, wolfy close behind.
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withen about 15 minutes, all 3 of the team was at the wharehouse, ghost and wolfy scouting around the building, looking for ways of entry or evidence of personel there. while the lynx was scanning the building, sense gett was busy, the team, didn't have the bluprints of the building, so they had to do this like the olden times.
onc they had scanned and scouted the building they met up and spoke in subvocalised speech (sound comming from the throat, barley reconiasable without the proper equipment) "there are 2 guards" the lynx transmitted, to wolfy and ghost. "one at the big double door, and the other making rounds"
"right, there is a skylight entrance, and 2 upper story windows" ghost said.
"and there is a locked side door" wolfy said "hey guys i got an idea" he said smiling and wispering fast, this would be cake.
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good job ghost. Keep them coming.
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"are you sure wolfy, it sounds sketchy" ghost said worridly, the plan so far was for wolfy to sneak in, open a window and let ghost inside, the drone would follow wolfy inside, he would play either distraction or taser, whitch ever was needed "i think this will end badly" she said shaking her head
"don't be a worry wort ghost" wolfy said strapping on his gloves and standing up. he walked over to the locked side door, withen a few seconds of opening the pic tool, he swiftly sliped inside, while the drone sliped in behind him. just missing the guard on rounds. and got to work and took down the alarma and sensors, while jake did that, wolfy leapt up and opened the window enouigh for ghost to glide through, they were her to destroy, but this was a golden oppertunity, how many times in a month could you get to a lone star place and not have some fun.
ghost flew over to the ammo section, and started cracking the ammo, scattering it, whatever it took to give thease guys a hard time. wolfy went over to the weapons and started with his mini weilder to melt and completely destroy some of the auto matic rifles, jake went over and kept an eye on the guard walking around the inside of the base, if he saw them this was over, they were given specific orders to make this look l;ike it wasn't a gang job, so they worked silentlky for another few minutes.
wolfy would melt some barreld here and there, then run to a new isle, ghost would follow with her own mini weilder, melting what wolfy missed, they really didn't want lone star to go to town on them, this was a help to the halloweeners as to the team. being silent was a job all it's own, between ghost's wings and jakes steel feet clicking on the cold reienforced concrete floor, it could have been a church service in the middle of prayer, but that was still too loud. on one flap of her wings, one of the guards heard and saw the flying girl.
"hey call lone star we got company" the guard yelled, a troll, weilding an assult rifle, well this might be bad, jake ran over and tased the guard near the front, but not before, he called lone star. "damn" jake said turning around and shooting the guard, as a drone, the steel lynx could hold a LMG and a pistol, sense he had a taser that took care of that space.while jake took care of the guard, wolfy and ghost set charges around the stragic points they had id'd earlier. after a few tense seconds the charges were set, "run" ghost shouted and threw in a gernade, and flew out, following wolfy and jake.
once they were outside, they met faces to faces with about 5 lone star chace veichles, and a riot veichle. they wern't expecting the team to run out so, the team had a few seconds to get to there veichles, jake slipped into a gutter, and was on his way home, ghosty hopped on her bike and sped off, wolfy on her wings "split up wolfy we'll meet at home" ghost said into her comm link and veering left into a side alley. she had said home, that meant no trap door, just go to the hide out above ground
"why" wolfy said veering right into another side alley. as he pulled the detonator and the rumble of an explosion was heard farther off
"cause i said so" ghost snapped, "i think they'll be watching that area, with what happened last night, too much heat" she said more calmly "sorry for snapping" before swearing loudly as a cruser turned next to her, as she exited the alley. "aww come on"
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(sorry for the double post but no one would reply sorry)
ghost swerved away from the cruser. this was not supposed to happen. she had to loose lone star fast. she leaned to the left and swerved between on comming traffic, leaving the lone star far behind. she was just missing a lot of the cars, so she swerved back onto the shoulder, still going the wrong way. she radioed wolfy "wolfy where are you this is getting hairy"
wolfy growled 2 crusers were on his tail. "you don't have to tell me" he said swinging his arm back to shoot at the crusers. he was getting boxed in. he gunned the harley, and tried to put some ground inbetween him and lone star.
ghost saw lone star heading tward her, they were smart and doubled around so they were with traffic heading tward her, she looked for an opening but couldn't find one, lone star was closing in fast. on her left was a barrier 4 feet high, no chance of jumping it. on the right was a steady stream of traffic, huge semi's were barreling past her. in front of her was a lone star cruser, heading at 80 mph tward her. the shoulder was too narrow to turn around. she had only one shot, she had to be presise.
she waas about to go when the curser got scraped by a semi, he honked and spooked ghost, in a state of panic she realised that there was a 2 ton hunk of steel racing tward her at 80 mph. it was going to meet her going at 70 mph. she freaked out as primal instincs took over she veered out to the right.
wolfy sped away from the cusiers and lost them, he then sped off to the high way. hoping to help ghost, as he got on he looked to his left and saw a familar falcon, on a familar bike, with the familar face of focus he had known when she was a bear, a falcon and before that just being an elf. get smashed by a semi. he was shocked as her could only ride and do nothing as his life long friend was smashed and proceeded to be ran over by the semi. all 30 tons of it rolling over his friend.
"TRRRRRRRIIIIIIIIIIIIISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH" he called swerving to help, but tha damage was done, as the semi rolled off of the nearly unidentifyable lump of flesh and feaythers, wolfy swooped by and flew by picking her up, he leaned back up to rebalance himself on his bike, then he pulled up with all his might and he soared over the barrier.
time seemed to stop as he seemingly hung above the streets below. after what seemed like an eternity to wolfy, ghost, his bike, and he crashed down onto the asphult below the free way. he called gett and jake. he looked back to the broken and mangled body that was sitting beside him and started to sob.
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awesome job, I like it.
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thanks, sorry if i make you sound like a sad sap (if thats the way u see it)
****2 weeks later****
ghost's eye lids, slid back, letting the artifical light from a fluresent light enter her mechanical eye. she blinked, and looked around, turning her head to the right, she heard the grindy sound of about 100 cervos grinding togeather. her mind was a bit foggy after weeks, hidden from the pain that had surounded her concious mind 2 weeks prior.
she let her eyes roam around the sparse room, till they lit on a familar face "jake?" she asked almost a croak. to her friend
jake looked sadly at his friend "yes it's me trish" he said, using her first name, before she was a bear, and falcon, and now this
trish looked at jake "whats going on man, are you ok" she asked, her voice raw and rough, but she didn't take notice, she wasn't taking notice of anything
jake started to get choaked up, his throat starting to close in the raw unbridled power of his emotions
"jake?" trish asked worridly starting to get up. but she paused about half way up. not of her own accord, she looked down at the chains wrapped around her mechanicle wrists. she looked at the chains dumbly, her mind felt like it was moving through old soy on a hot day. after a few minutes of thinking, her eyes slid down to the rest of her body. she took in her body, all cyber replaced now.
"cyber torso, crainum, leg, leg, full arm and full arm, complete with cyber hands" gett said walking in, wolfy following him, his eyes were wet, he stood next to jake, he was crying silently.
trish continued to stare dumbly at her body, not an inch of skin showing anymore.
gett walked over and sat at the lone stool near her head, he patted her head, like she was still the little kid that had always tagged along with her older brother and his friends. "you had an accident" he said starting "it was supposed to be a simple job" he started
trish's eyes widened as that day came rushing back to her in great detail, as gett spoke more came back to her. she closed her eyes when he came to the part with the semi "please, no more" she said holding back tears that would have fallen, if she had tears.
wolfy looked like he was about to say something, but was silenced by gett with a look. they had done the best they could, they had to sell almost everything to save her, they had tried to save money so the operation would be more suscessful, but there wasn't much to do, a single forearm costed upward of 8,000 nuyen. for an ovbious forearm it was 8,000. a synthetic one was 16,000.
after a few miutes trish calmed down, and gett continued the story. leaving nothing out. after the story was done, jake and wolfy had moved closer to there little friend. each of them wishing with all there mite that ghost couls hear and understand them, she wasn't living anymore.
she was a cyber zombie, they had no way of knowing if she was herself or not, they had spent every nuyen that had to get her this far, but theystill didn't know it was enough. as much as gett and jake hated to admit it, to themselves and anybody else, they thought ghost was gone, they had wanted to let her go, the easy way, instead of binding her sole to her body.
if it wasn't for wolfy being as stubborn as he was, trish probably wouldn't even be in that room with them. he knew she would pull through, she just had to.
"trish" wolfy said gently walking up next to her "do you remember me" he asked
trish's eyes grew dark, her face was shadowed. wolfy lowered his head, she's gone... she's gone...
trish reached up and pushed the foxes head up so she could look him in the eye. "like i could forget my friend, that i've known all my life" she said, shakily and rough. but it was there. her sole was there, it was there. she was there with them
wolfy's eyes started to water, he reached down, and uncliped the chains and hugged trish. openly sobbing now. "we thought we lost you" he cryed, as gett and jake came up and joined in, they were also crying. trish started when she saw wolfy crying, he always tried to act cool calm and collected, but he was as soft as any sole who had no parents, and had almost lost a family mamber.
"i thought i lost you too" she said dry sobbing she felt safe and warm for the first time in weeks, in the arms of her family, this was where she belonged.
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Awesome job, keep them coming.
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(lol i'm working on it man, writing is fun but hard, u really have to get your thoughts down right man lol)
days turned into weeks, for duo and her friends. a cyber zombie was not an easy life to live, while having great advantages. you also had great weeknesses. in the last week alone duo (sense it's coustom for each person to have a name and have it change as you change in life) had been attacked by spirits. they saw her as an abomination. it made for slow recovery.
duo opened her eyes again. it was about 6 pm. she had just finished a nap after a few hours of physical therapy. it was odd to have no eukariotic cells in your body. no circulation, in the human way.
jake strode into duos room, 3 slices of pizza in his hand, he was followed behind by wolfgang. they each took a seat by her bed side, jake handed duo a slice and gave one to wolfy. it was there new tradition to all eat in her room, till she got better. they echa touched their piece to the others smiled and took a bite. it was then that duo realised. "hey guys where's gett" she asked as wolfgang looked down, and jake had the saddest look on his face "whats going on" she asked, her voice was still a little rough.
"gett had to go out for some air" jake said cheerily. it wasn't ovbious to duo that he was faking, wolfy caught it cause he was in on it only, man jake was a good talker. wolfy smiled too and pointed to her pizza "eat it's good" he said, about a week ago duo was ok enough to come up with a new power source. food, food did have energy so after a few days working. it was up and running. but that cost more money.
after duo had finished her food, she was put to bed by wolfy and jake, they turned the lights out and left the room. once the door was closed by wolfy. jake let out an exaugsted sigh and slumped out on the couch. followed by wolfgang. they were very diffrent jake and wolfy were, one calm and cool, the other filled with a charismatic energy. one who liked the shadows, and one who liked the lime light. they were very diffrent, but at this moment they both had the same thoughts running through there head.
how duo was doing, and how in hell were they gonna pay for it.
the cyber body, the upgrades, the mage who bound her sole. everything costmoney here. wolfy, jake and gett had been on turns to pull jobs to get money, and to work the dreaded day job to pay for duo. they were in deep trouble if they couldn't come up with the money soon. at that moment gett called up over the comm link "GUYS" he shouted nearly blowing out there ear drums
"i have 4 lone star crusiers on my tail, i need back up man now" he said gunfire in the background.
wolfy looked back at duos room, jake put a hand on his shoulder "she'll be fine, but not if we don't help gett and get that nuyen" jake said grimly
wolfy looked once more at duo's door, and he hardened his face and looked back at jake "lets go" he said a dark smile on his lips, he had wanted a chance for payback on those lone star punks, he took out his ruger super warhawk, and hopped on his bike, and sped off into the night, jake only a few seconds behind on his motor cycle. he and wolfy disapearing into the black seattle night.
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Great job duo, keep up the good work.
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Ah the story has come along very well Duo, You have been busy pounding away at this one. Sorry I haven't gotten back about it earlier I do read them I've just been really busy in RL. I like the unique style of yours and hope you will continue
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this is pretty good, keep it up :)
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thanks wolfy
thanks tezztor, don't worry stuff hapens IRL, thanks for reading it and for all the comments man u 2 wolfy and 2 u gizor lol
gett drifted through the small roads and back alleys of 6th world seattle, running from the law. "come on guys where are you" he asked his comm link. this run was an extraction run, get in get the goods and get out, wolfy and jake's drone had helped him aquire the data filearound 5 pm, it was supposed to be getts job to bring it to the jhonson. unfortunietly this would not go as planed. he threw out a land mine
wolfy pulls up allong side of gett "awww i thought being not interested would put them off" he joked tossing a flash bang behind him as gett turned into an alley, while wolfy followed behind him. "nah they think i'm playing hard to get" he said "i guess i'll have to play harder" he said detonating the mine he set a ways back
"gett send me the data, i'll get jhonson to py up" wolfy said via the comm link as he pulled neck and neck to getts car, gett threw the disc out the window, and sped off. he lost lone star soon, and then headed out and start work on the next run. every night they did this run back up and doing 3 runs a night at least, and they still were in debt, there had to be another way.
"i'll check out that tip about those collars" jake radioed with all that had been happening, little has been heard about those stupid collars. he sped off in the hover craft tward another bar.
gett yawned. the bags under his eyes were extreamly ovbious. "i'll get the security stuff taken care of at ares's plant" gett said turning on the highway, yawning deeply. it was going to be a long night.
*** 10 minutes later ***
gett sat down just off of ares property, he closed his eyes and emmersed himself in the virtual sea of the matrix, this was where he belonged. his avitar a ninja troll, called up a sprite "i need the pass codes for the inner workings of ares corprate security" gett said as the sprite scurryed away into the void, he moved through the near infinet data and space of the matrix till he found what he was looking for. this was the advantage of being otaki or a technomancer like gett. you could summon sprites, as a mage summons spirits. while he went to work, the sprites would pollow his orders to the leter.
jake strolled into the bar, he looked around hoping to find someone he knew, he quickly jumped in and subscribed to the bars PAN and withen seconds he was flodded with menus spam, entertainment news, and almost every kind of deal going down. he looked around and sat at the bar he looked sidelong at his old college buddy "long time no see locke" he said not looking at the mage sitting next to him, locke's face halfway down into his beer mug. the picture of someone who had lost everything and was ready to die.
wolfgang stepped out of the bar with a smile on his face. 10,000 nuyen was in his pocket. he looked at the time through his AR (augumented reality) glasses, he realised what time it was and hopped on his bike. they couldn't do anymore real work tonight. he drove home.
gett hacked into ares PAN and looked at the corps records and deals, he hated stooping to this but it was what had to be done. he hacked into there bank accounts and swiftly transfeered nuyen into one of his SINs (system ID number, a # ure supposed to have for life, but most shadowrunners lost theres and now have 2 or 3 fake ones) he then swiftly erased any data trail he left. and exited the system, they had had a lot of bad luck, it was only natural for something to go right. he stood up and drove home. the knolege of another 20,000 in his account
jake saw how drunk locke was and he picked him up, easily negotiating his way out of the room. he set up locke in the hover craft and went home this would be interesting.
duo awoke to a red peerlesent being rushing at her, she was always getting followed by thease things, she slowly reached over picked up her ares preditor 4 and pumped 2 bullets into the spirits head, but the spirit kept comming. dimly her mind wondered where wolfy and jake was, she kept firing but the spirit advanced, she didn't even feel the need to scream.
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Awesome job. Keep them coming.
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(thanks wolfy)
duo moved her hand to the left and knocked over a water glass, it fell and shattered, she looked uncaringly at the fire spirit advancing upon her, he swong and slashed into her, she saw the circuts get cut but there was no blood, only oil and water ozing out, she saw her self "bleed" and glared at the cut, her thoughts were comming back, allong with the burning intensity of hubris. she opened her hands and 10 razers shot out, allong with 2 hand blades, she leapt at the spirit.
gett got to the front door of the wearhouse, there "public" hang out, it was owned under gett's name, the basement lead into an elevator witch lead into there underground safe house. gett drove in, and hit a few buttons and the floor pulled back to reveal the elevator that was to take him down. he yawned under his eyes were purple- ish circles, the universal sign of a night owl forced to wake up and get the worm. he drove onto the elevator.
wolfy pulled in next gett almost taking off his mirror. wolfgang smiled tiredly as gett rolled down his window "i got the 10 K" wolfy started as the elevator sunk down into the earth.
"i got 20 K from some very generious ares business men" gett said also smiling tiredly "do you know where jake is" he asked
wolfy shook his head "i don't know" he said laconicly, wolfy was sorta the quiet guy always shrouded in shadow, just the way he wanted. but that was why he wasn't a face, coupled with the fact that he was furry.
they reached the bottom, wolfy looked over and saw duo's door open, he saw the scratch marks, his eyes widened, he jumped off his bike and the elevator, right over the guard rails, hit the groung on his hind paws and rolled on his shoulder, he rose perfectly fine into duos room. she saw the spirit and drew his gun and fired at the apex of it's ark up.
the creature screamed and charged wolfy. he didn't even notice duo, until she jumped on the spirits back and clawed at it, her hands leathel weapons, she hooked her hand blades into the spirits face and pulled hard. the creature screamed and fell backward. wolfy shot once more at the fire being and with one final scream it dissapeared. wolfy holstered his gun and ran over to help duo, gett ran in behind him.
*** some time later ***
duo awoke she sat up, her side was patched as well as her arms. gett was just taking off the rubber gloves covered in oil, as wolfy threw away some patch material into the garbage. she smiled and sat up. the recent fight had somehow cleared her mind of the fog.
"well it seems our little duo is back" gett said as he saw the alertness in his sisters eyes. he knew it wasn't over, there were always difficultys with cyber zombies, but she was back, and that made him belive that nothing is impossible. "duo wolfy and i-" he got cut off as jake ran into the room, covered in blood, an unconsiouc figure on his back, he gasped and coughed blood and fell over onto the stainless steel floor.
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Awesome job.
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(thanks wolfy)
trowa looked over at the sleeping jake, he had passed out about 2 days ago, she wondered when he'd wake up. wolfy was out on a run with gett, she had been doing a few mod's to herself to get ready for some more shadowrunning. they still didn't know what happened, locke was laying next to jake on a seprate bed in the medicla room, they only had 2 rooms, the other one was still being ocupyed by the new rhino tag.
jake opened his eyes and blinked in the light. he looked over and saw trowa "hey trowa" he said coughing a little he had been prety shot up when he came in a few days ago. trowa asked what had been on her mind sense he had got home "what happened man" she asked on the edge of her seat.
jake sighed and closed his eyes, as if retelling a story. "i saw locke at a bar and i tried to take him home, but some goons shot at me, i think they were cedar krupp, they were using locke as bait, trying to find out who was snooping around" he said sadly
"oh man" trowa said she was really sad. she got up and hugged her friend "come on man" she said stepping back
"i'm ok" he said tiredly looking at the ceiling "i don't know about locke tho" he said looking over at the elf in question. "they shot him up a lot"
trowa looked over at the elf also "ya i saw, he also had a collar around his neck the same as tag's, we got it off tho, it;s under storage lock and key" she said "what happens now" she asked
"probably strike a blow back to cedar krupp" he said tiredly "they attacked me, the collar in there has there mechanicle signature on it, and theyh had goons attack me" he said angrially
"so we strike a blow back" trowa said "you know we can't do it alone" she said thinking of all the ppl they had that workeed for them
"so we just need to find some more ppl to help" he said taking out his comm link "lets see if i can't find a few friends who want to take cedar krupp down, i'm sure all the otaku will help" he said bringing up the memories of cedar krupp kidnapping and disecting the technomancers, they have been waiting for a long time "and i'm sure tag's team will help" he continued "we'll strike a blow back" he said smiling
"so we will" trowa agreed calling up her own friends, this would be fun
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Its definitely coming along nicely Your writing skills are improving as well
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thanks tezz. now i'm stuck, i need a lot of cha.s for the next part of my stories, i guess i just have to wait, i can't come up with mabey 5 more cha.'s