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Creative Arts and Media => Creative Writing => Topic started by: scarypuppy on November 03, 2008, 12:29:02 AM
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High school, the proving grounds of your adult identity, that or a final resting place for any and all optimism. A paticular group of friends has grown disillusioned with the future, seeing other friends either give up or work themselves into a corner. They all have nothing that is truly theirs, nothing to take up their massive ammounts of free time. No Drive, No Dreams, No Aspiriations.
They include Enezel the Chow, an intelligent but extremely distant boy who usually doesnt want anything to do with others, even in his group. Jojo The Silverwolf , the outgoing yet delicate youngest member of the group, was advanced to High-school due to high grades, usually sticks close to Enezel. Scyler the tiger, an athletic but shy type who doesnt really speak up. And of course Scyla, the Angsty and mysterious member of the group, is known to have a short temper.
Except for Jojo, everyone is on the way out, Jr's and Seniors all getting ready to get the hell out.
These are the Days at Lovecraft High.
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Im gonn assume this is a premise for a story, or at least some sort of prologue.
Is there going to be a story of this?
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(Its an offhand intro, more characters and challeges are coming up, I'm not really all here right now, lotta things on my mind ^_^)
(Such Propper language, congratulations, most people Tawk liek dis nd dnt evah crrct thmslvs LoL!!!1111!)
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xD! You're awesome!...I ROFL'ed..and you plan these things out very well,too.Kudos...or maybe it's on-the spot-....nvm..excellent job! (really hyper right now...too much candy..>.>.)
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"A day after a day is a day before a day following a day after a day." Mr. Olonso paced before the large class, a book held up to his nose as he strode. Jojo fiddled with his pen, trying to get the ink to flow again. "Why even Bother Joji?" Jojo looked to his right at Enezel, who was slumped back into his seat, one leg out across the aisle and resting on the support rail of Jojo's desk and the other tapping steadily on the floor. He brushed aside the bright pink bangs that covered his shadowed eyes and licked his lips, waiting for a response. "He...told us to take notes..." "right, of course." Enezel moved his legs and leaned towards Jojo, "what you doing after school?" Jojo looked suprised, "ah, n..nothing, I dont have anything to do." "wanna come over?" "ah...s..sure!" "AHEM" Enezel and Jojo looked over to Mr. Olonso, who was leaning back on the markerboard, "so glad you could re-join us." "No Problem, go on." Enezel crossed his arms and sat back in his seat, giving a wide smile to Mr. Olonso, "your Sarcasm hurts me deeply Mr. Garner." he continued on in his lesson and ignored Enezel's continued whispering to an emberassed Jojo.
The group was clustered in the usual spot, in the shade behind the R'lyeh gymnasium, and were in hot debate about the school's upcoming writing contest. "Its stupid, I mean, our school is named after one of the wierdest, most famous gothic writers ever and yet the only categories are, 'Sports and student life' total bull man!" Scyla was shouting up a storm, the others simply nodding in agreement to appease her. Enezel walked up, closely followed by Jojo, and gave the usual nod to everyone gathered. "What now Sky?" "this damn school, they decide to just ignore the name on the FREAKING WALLS!" "Just let it alone, its nothing." Jojo rubed at his arm, "I wanted to join..." Scyla gave him a look with her only eye that wasny covered by hair, "Join then, sell out, give up, the B$#^#@%# might even pat you on the head!" Jojo looked down at his toes, "N...nevermind." Enezel put a hand on Jojo's shoulder re-assuringly, "Go ahead and do it Joji, do it just to piss her off hah." "I...Guess." "Eni, you care about nill, why do you care now!?" "Joji needs some encouragement, let him learn the hard way." Jojo changed the subject and looked at Carlos, the only one in the group who was in athletics, "What do you think C, should I go for it?" Carlos looked up from a brochure he had in his lap, "I only joined once, diddnt make it." Everyone laughed, Jojo rubbing at his arm nervously again, "Maybey I shouldnt...." Enezel gave him a playful shove, "Do it Joji, come on, show some spirit." Jojo looked up at Enezel's wide smile and blushed, "s...shure, I'll do it." Scyla sat down against the wall, "Well, here we go, another shattered dream to add to our wall, you know I wanted to be a dancer?" "shut up Sky, you wanted to be a laker girl." "same thing.....Just different costumes." Jojo sat down near Enezel, who had gotten into another conversation with some odd husky who had joined the group the other week, his name started with an E, Jojo couldnt remember. He looked through a notebook at his sketches and stopped at one in paticular, blushing vividly again and sighing deeply. Enezel turned, "Whats that Joji?" "N...Nothing!" he shut the book and grinned nervously, Enezel shrugging and going back to his chat. Jojo squinted and looked over at the statue of the school's patron saint, Lovecraft standing tall yet a bit rigid in bronze. "At least I have something to look forward to at the end of today."
First chapter, mainly intro and outline, sorry if its not that well done.
more to come.
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~jaw dropped~...whoa....,I am TOTALLY looking forward to the next one,man!..10 fingers!
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Wooo... So far, I'm liking the premise of it as well as the intro... Characters seem real, love the sarcasm as well.
Only thing I can really see that would improve this would be adding spacing between all of the quotes and whatnot, make it easier to follow.
:upupdi3:
I eagerly await the next part
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Updating Today :ded:
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w00t!!..~points to emo and smiles toothily~ I frikin' LUFF this guy!
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I'm not in it.... v.v
Well, it's good. Seperating quotes between lines would be nice.
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Definately Updating Today.
Introducing New Characters. :th_Pyong-1:
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New characters....????????
...I better not be the villain.. >.>
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xD....i don't think you will..
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"Its been getting colder lately." Jojo tugged his beanie down a bit more on his head, zipping up the collared sweater to his neck. Enezel walked indifferently a good 5 steps ahead, humming some song to himself while his foot focussed it's attention to a beaten soda can he had been kicking for the last mile. Enezel lived on the outskirts of town in a fairly large house. His parents were hardly ever home because both of them had military jobs that kept them away for long stints of time. His uncle, a Vietnam veteran, lives with them to take care of Enezel, much to both of their protest.
Enezel shoved the front door open with his shoulder and stood in the doorway for a moment, taking in a deep breath and then shouting out, "Serg'nt Garner, Atteenshun!" A very tall but haggard looking chow came into the hallway, scratching at the mussed fur on his head. Jojo leaned in to get a better look and couldnt contain himself when he saw Enezel's uncle sans one leg, "Oh My God!" Enezel gave a harsh look to Jojo and looked back at his Uncle who diddnt seem in the bit least supprised, "yeah, shocking huh, sometimes I still try and wiggle my toes."
Gah....I made like 3 different versions of this freaking scene and they all got corrupted....
and this one isnt even complete!!!
this is all I could salvage!!!
More....soon.....BLARG!!!
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cool story, i havn't seen a story about hs times in writing and lit. thats like this one cool
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Nice. I really like it, owner. Keep it up and hopefully you'll be able to turn it into a book! :P
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Jojo covered his mouth and stood aghast in the doorway, Enezel dragging his paw down his face and sighing, "well Unc, this is my friend Joji, he's not one for the gory stuff." His uncle tugged at his thin beard and shrugged, "Coulda been worse, kid coulda buckled and ran." Enezel laughed lightly and grabbed Joj0's arm, tugging him along. "You kids be good, If something bad happens, my crippled A&& isnt gonna head up stairs to save you."
Jojo sat awkwardly on the edge of Enezel's bed while he went into his bathroom to change. "You need to loosen up Joji, you looked like a figurine back there." "Hah, yeah, I just, I diddnt expect that." Enezel came back out in only his skinny jeans, a clean shirt gripped in his left paw. Jojo blushed and looked away, putting away Enezel shirtless for future reference. "He got hurt in 'Nam, something called Tet, anyways cost him a leg." He tugged on his shirt and went over to the laptop sitting on top of a dresser, brushing aside the soda cans and chip bags that littered the top. "Ive never seen your parents." "Yeah, my Dads' in Europe and my mom works at some air base in Los Angeles, my parents let me stay here because we have alot of relatives." Jojo removed his sweater and bag and laid his head on the large pillow at the foot of the bed, keeping just his feet on the opposite edge. Enezel stood from his chair and went to the bed, going over Jojo to lay on the other side, folding his hands on his stomache. Jojo shifted uncomfortably in place, feeling warmer with Enezel's added heat but a bit complacent with him there. Enezel rolled on his side and looked at Jojo, waiting till he turned his head in embarassment. "Ive only known you for about a year Joji, and whenever the group wants to meet up somewhere after school, you always find a way out of it." "I'm just usually busy." "But you jumped at the chance to come with me today, I havent even seen you call your parents to tell them where you are." Jojo bit his lip and turned the other way, a rising urge to get up and sit somewhere else overcoming him, but he still just lay there, waiting in silence. "Are you gay?" Jojo felt his stomach clench, his heart pounding up into his throat, he tugged his legs up closer to him, almost a fetal position. He diddnt know himself. He had always had odd feelings for his friends, the boy ones anyways, and he never really knew how to approach it. How would he answer, should he even answer? What would Enezel do, would he become violent, be understanding, what?
Enezel slid in the bed and pushed Jojo's shoulder down into the bed, forcing him to lay out on his back, and then moved on top of him, sitting on his lap and putting his hands on either side of his head. Jojo gulped and searched for something to say, a strange feeling taking him over. Enezel leaned in and was nose to nose, "Joji, I asked, are you gay?" Jojo couldnt answer, he just froze and looked back at him, his mouth moving but not forming any words. Enezel looked into his eyes and seemed to be searching for the answer he wanted, then, he relaxed, the wide smile that always but Jojo at ease coming to his face, "I always wondered about you Joji; always looking offended or jealous when some girl walks up to me and asks me for my number or a date, always acting like an overbearing sister whenever I acted stupid in school, always watching me run during PE." Jojo blushed at the last one and turned his head, Enezel turning his chin with his paw, "I still want an answer Joji." Jojo warmed and loosened, rising up and wrapping his arms around Enezel, burying his face in his chest and crying softly, Enezel hugging him back just as tightly. Jojo felt Enezel kiss the top of his head, a soft whisper sending him into another bout of sobbing, "I always wondered Joji, and I guess you always did too."
Blegh, not that good, I apologize greatly.
the future installments will be much longer and with more characters, plus some deep teen stuff like...... uhm..... food....and....road trips.....and....PREGNANCY!!! hahah, that last one was a joke.
Lets see how things go.
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Never Completed, Goodbye ^_^
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ATTENTION!
I gained permission from the Mod Tezz to Necro this one and ONLY thread.
I do not condone nor support the Necroing of old threads because it detracts from other author's visibility in the community.
Disclaimer Ended.
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hmm.... It's good you decided to bring it back. I hope it goes well.
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Update Tomorrow.
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Enezel pulled Jojo into his lap, the cramped photo-booth not allowing for much room. Jojo and Enezel had started an odd courtship since the incident at Enezel's house. Jojo was more sociable now and hung with the group more often, even going to the concert they had all pitched in for in San Diego. Enezel picked up Jojo's ears and stuck out his tongue, the pair making more funny faces for every quick flash. Carlos whistled loudly outside while he sat on a rickety child's ride near the food court of the mall, the rest of the group waiting on Enezel and Jojo. Scyla shouted into the booth, "You guys gonna be done making out any time soon?" Enezel stuck out his response, catching the attention of a shocked passing family. Scyler slapped his hand and swatted Scyla on the arm, "stop causing S*&#"
"Well if they diddnt suck up the precious few minutes we have before the movie starts, then maybe I'd be in a better mood." The odd husky that had joined them a few weeks ago was singing some misfits song to himself, continually looking over his shoulder like he was going to be assaulted. "Hey, ERIC!" Eric jumped at the call and raced over, Carlos laughing, "Calm down man, you look nervous." He scratched his right ear and laughed nervously, "An ex of mine works at one of the stores....I dont want to run into them."
Enezel came out of the booth holding Jojo's hand, even more stares being attracted. Carlos spat out the toothpick he had taken from a free sample and walked over, rubbing his hands together, "So, we ready to see the most complicated conspiracy movie in cinema history besides the Manchurian Candidate?" The others all raised their fists in a cry and raced towards the theatre, other shoppers spooked and curling back from them. The front of the food court entrance was plastered with advertisement for the movie, all with the Stone-faced Hugh Jackman looking outwards at nothing, a famous bandana wrapped around his forehead. Metal Gear Solid was the years first and seemingly only video game adaption film, and so far it had gotten nothing but great reviews from both legal showings and hacker leaks, the troll community online being shut up for the first time in a while. Enezel brought up the group's money and went up to the counter, still holding a slightly shy Jojo's hand, "6 for MGS please." The teller looked it up and shook his head, "Sorry, you have to be 21 to purchase tickets for your group."
"Its rated R though, I'm 18."
"Its law kid."
A young Human with enough metal on his face to make silverwear leaned in and smiled widely, his Liberty spikes bending like over-burdened trees, "Hey Kids, lost track of you all." He searched the crowd and tugged Eric close to him, walking up to the counter and placing a hand on Enezel's shoulder, "Ah sir, sorry I'm this young man's cousin, I was supposed to get in line with 'em but I got lost, I give them full permission." The teller looked them all over, "Your...related to an Anthro?"
"Come on man, its the millenia, dont tell me you dont know people who cross."
The teller shook his head and rung it up, "Are you included?"
"Oh yeah, me and my date."
A Husky with dirty pink coloring and dread-locks strolled up, winking at Eric, "Hey Walkie-talkie." Eric rolled his eyes and took a ticket from the teller, going to the snack counter with Scyla and Scyler, Carlos staying with Enezel and Jojo. The man gave money for the additonal two tickets and ruffled Jojo's hair, laughing, going over to the snack counter as well. Enezel looked to the female husky, her head was shaking in dissappointment. "You know Eric?"
"My real cousin, he doesnt like me doing favors for him, not even Jared, my boyfriend and his Idol." Enezel looked over and saw Eric hugging the older Human, the pair laughing and exchanging jabs to the shoulder. Enezel, not one for subtlty, asked, "He not like you?"
"Yeah."
"because of the Human BF?"
"Nah, he loves Jared, so does his family, theyre all accepting."
"Then what is it?"
"When he was little I took care of him alot, and we got close, But about 5 years ago he got in a bad fight with his dad and he tried to find somewhere else to stay, anywhere."
"He went to you?" She nodded and rubbed at her arm. Jojo took notice and tugged at his hand, nodding to the others who were already heading to the theatre following Jared.
"Well, what happened?"
"I said no, that he needed to act mature and face whatever was troubling him, instead of trying to make it just fade away by distancing himself."
"He still hold it against you?"
"yeah, thats why he's stubborn about everything, kind of like an odd impulse to not want to ask anyone for help, just face it.....like big cousin Marlaina told him."
Jojo tugged again at Enezel's hand, and he finally moved with them, Marlaina following and catching up to Jared at the door to their screen.
Jared Pecked Marlaina on the cheek and took her hand, "Walkie-talkie still acting up?" Marlaina nodded and kept walking with him, Enezel and Jojo moving away to sit with the others towards the top of the seats. Eric was nibbling on a sour punch straw in silence, Carlos sneakily slipping a few out of the bag. Enezel glanced over at him and noticed that he was looking down at Marlaina in the front row, an almost sad look entering his features. Jojo squeezed his hand and leaned into him when he lifted his arm, lifting the cup-holder to allow Jojo to be in his arms. "Enie......Leave it alone."
Enezel sat in silence, watching the movie with Jojo continually jumping in fright and excitement from the movie. the whole time he would glance at Eric, who would occasionally still glance down at Marlaina, the same look taking him over.
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Awe, sounds like Eric wants to talk, but can't think of anything and is still kinda ticked. :P That stinks.