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Creative Arts and Media => Creative Writing => Topic started by: scarypuppy on May 13, 2008, 02:06:40 PM
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Well, Ive recently Leased out most of my songs to friends who wanted to work on them and develop a pattern for them, plus if my band doesnt work out I can always just be a songwriter.
First off.....
Why Vampires Make Horrible Lovers:
Its a crying shame, and I guess your to blame,
After we fell out and stopped caring as friends.
My how the sun Burns!!
You dressed in black, when you saw me, your confidence your shroud. Its all I Can do to keep from running out.
My how the sun Burns!! , In the Summer, a sky blood red and shifting, from a romantic hue to a difficult purple, the color of your lips, when we last kissed, your pale skin a contrast to my own.
My How the sun Burns!! My How the Sunburns!! It keeps me warm and in your arms.
The last time we went out, the scene was quiet as a grave, streets emptied and ours for the shaking.
Covering me, with your still heart, no amount of boyish charm could rescue you from the night.
My How the Sun Burns, The sunrise took us by suprise and left me holding a shadow's hand.
[Well..... heh.]
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The text is good but I get a feeling that it's missing something. You could try adding something to it, but in overall it's a good start. :)
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I like it. Maybe a rhythm? Or a certain beat that isn't specified might help?
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I agree with Sam. Although the lyrics are very good, we need a general idea of the beat, tempo, pitch and rythm to truly appreciate the song.
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why would someone laugh?
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So much positive reinforcement.
now for some demented stuff!
Explanation: Im not very open about my sexuality, only towards those few I trust enough to tell. and before I even admited it to myself, I was really torn inside, so this song explains it, it was about my feelings towards a guy I, well diddnt really make out with, but who kinda got me a bit further towards realization, that is, till he decided to "Flip Sides".
Genre: Metal/Speed Metal.
Your dead to me, so that makes me a Necropheliac. (Necro-Romantic)
CAN YOU F*&$ING BREATHE!!!!
Decaying within with every side glance, your gaze puts me in a trance.
I Say what I mean
men ruined with a single phrase, I know we cant move on, dragging our feet when we dangle from the ganging tree.
The rope gets tighter, tighter, tighter, and Tighter!
We beheld a sunrise like no other, with mouthes open and the air caught in our last breath, Im shaking, my bands hold too tightly, and soon, your through.
Move on, drag out a heavy sigh, your life was cheap, so I know what I F&*$ING Buy!
Soul searching for what I lost, your ashes fall on my waiting tounge.
Days gone, wasted on an unrealistic dream, we cant, go back, nonetheless we try.....
Forsaken in my own life, refusals my own path, I tried to keep a straight face, when I buried you
Waiting for something to save us, its nothing to do with you, I laid you in your grave, then decided to climb in too.
[typical lyrics but meh]
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i liked that one better than the first one
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[thanks Dakota]
heres another one:
Explanation: none really
Genre: Goth/Emo/Screamo
That Weird Feeling I get under my bandages.
I Brace myself, against myself, This while ive been in just doesnt do it for me.
Murder, Murder, the sadness in your eyes, keep it locked up tightly within your heart.
your heart.
The flowers upon my form, its shattered and it just gets worse, whatever you do....
Dont look so scared!
Look towards the sky, my how time flies, When were brought back down to Earth.
Forgiveness is a summers sky, the fire in my life, thats burned me so many times, but I dont care, it makes me feel alive
The flowers up on my form, Im shattered and it just gets worse, whatever you do, whatever you do...
Im the causeway to Neverwere.
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that one is good too, but i like the second one best
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I take it your a metal fan Dakota.
In that case....
Explanation: Based off an HP lovecraft Story.
Genre: Metal/Gothic (Opt)
The Colour out of Space.
"It was apparent, that all healthy living thins must leave this house."
It fell from the sky, a messenger of mock life
Dont drink the water
It drained the life out of all around it, changing this place into barren wastes.
Oh faithful father, what has brought this dread up on your humble head? (Sky's Dread)
Dont drink the water
It slowly took its toll, Defenseless and weakened, have they all become
A father, hides mother, across from his feral son
Dear Children, Forsaken, Into their final ends, a well thats far too deep, contains their few remains.
Not of this world, out of the sky, not of this world, family taken, not of this world, the eyes cant see, not of this world, whats above the trees.
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yep, im a metal fan and i now like this one best
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[glad to please]
[now onto the others, mostly screamo and rock.]
Explanation: A love song I made for my Friend Max and His Girlfriend.
Genre: Soft Rock/Emo
You see what they do to me? (Only You Babe)
A sigh, passes through my lips, we know this was over before we began.
Echoes hold our minds in a cold dead grasp, while we watch what could be done.
Sing softly, And hold me close, your embrace was my drug, your voice my painkiller.
Folding on a promise made, you seem to want more.
How the hell do I hold you now!?
Hands tied, behind our backs, concealing what they'll never know.
Endless
(We Are martyrs)
Heartless
(I'll love you for it)
Hold me
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i realy liked that one too. i like all rock, just not all bands
our avis are sitting almost the same way, lol
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nice, as for our avis, yeah, only yours is sporty and mine is emo hah.
Explanation: A Dedication/story song I did on shortnotice.
Genre: Hard Rock/Emo/Screamo/Altrock/Gothic (Opt)
Social Discrepancy.
A story like this deserves closure, a word of devotion, but you wouldnt give.
My eyes are now open, ive seen, to my horror, what youve done to me.
We try to survive in the face of this wave, Crashing us down into silence unbroken since time began.
our time was too precious, you felt like you were, just fading away, but you showed your darker side, when i found you in another's bed.
Oh wo'es he who cant survive, this , test.
So Now I stand proud, dagger having run through, a flood of emotions, that ends my breath.
The windows are shattered, but still we walk again.
walls break away, and the sky's alive, call to misfortune, I'll never see you again.
Now turn around, face me not, know that, I loved you, long before this storm.
My eyes are now closing, for the last time, let me cease, let me be, without your treacherous hand.
walls break away, and the sky's alive, call to misfortune, Ill never see you again.
Now turn around, face me not, know that, I loved you, long before this storm.
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These lyrics are really good! If you ever make complete songs out of them I would like to here them. :)