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Title: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: Dr. Strange on March 02, 2008, 08:45:07 PM
The child watched the orange and black wolger shrug its powerful shoulders, mesmerized. Its cerulean eyes flickered with gold specks as it growled in response to a question he neither understood nor heard. The beast was built like a tiger with a midnight body and dull orange stripes. On its elegant face, identical blue eyes stood out on a black background with narrow red slashes from forehead to cheek on either side of a soft textured nose. It turned to his left and moved foreward a pace or two, eyes scanning the dark with an uneasey glare ceaselessly.

He took in air and held it, hoping against fate it would not see him and move on. He'd been watching the group of Creatures for a semester now; six months. His widened green eyes stared out of a tan face beneath dark brown hair that reached the middle of his neck. The effort it took to keep his breathing quiet and steady was in itself difficult; but now that the beast had stopped, he felt as if the air refused to leave his bosy or enter it. His breath went out in a silent exhale of relief as the eyes moved on.

In a few more seconds, another pair of eyes appeared near the hole he was peeping through. These were a  silvery gray in a red face with black tears permanently tattooed at the corners of each eye. Rage boiled just beneath the surface; this one's stripes were a dark blue. Walking beside him, (the tone of their voices and their markings clued who was male ond who female) a pair of scrumptious legs stepped into veiw. He knew this to be Elias, the only living human to associate with animals/creatures like them; unearthly beautiful and teasingly untouchable.

"Marcello halt." Her voice was soft and sweet, a cardinal's song; "I believe we have an uninvited guest among us. Search them out and silence them: I shall be waiting in the Corpus for your swift return. DON'T be late again."
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: Mr. Meerkat on March 03, 2008, 09:19:43 AM
this is so good work here, keep it up.

I love it
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: Dr. Strange on March 04, 2008, 12:02:11 AM
Thanks, Meerkat. I started it for an extra-credit assignment for English and it just blossomed into somethnig else. I'll see if I can post my poetry book...Some of the stuff's a little off but I love it. And I haven't made much progress on it. I'll post another page when I get time to, after I've written it; of course!
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: OneGrayWolf on March 08, 2008, 01:07:32 AM
It's very good! :D Some minor grammatical errors, but good nonetheless. Keep it up, I'd love to see more  =3 :D :)
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: Dr. Strange on March 08, 2008, 06:14:36 AM
Point them out for me, Grey.
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: OneGrayWolf on March 08, 2008, 08:48:10 AM
rofl, i meant minor as in REALLY minor XD looking back though they might've just been a couple typos :p besides, only like two or three... not that many. sorry if i offended you in any way  :sniffle:
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: Dr. Strange on March 09, 2008, 06:46:09 PM
*chuckles*
Nah, I was just making sure they're good. I have this thing about things like this being perfect..It gets really bad when I decide to post them on here...
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: OneGrayWolf on March 10, 2008, 04:14:05 PM
*hugglez* :D
Ya, it's good. What do you mean "It gets really bad?"
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: Dr. Strange on March 11, 2008, 11:12:16 AM
As in, if it isn't all perfect, I throw the paper away and start over. >.< I need to stop wasting paper and start using the computer.
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: Mr. Meerkat on March 11, 2008, 02:17:47 PM
The computer is alot more better because if you make a mistake it will liet you know and plus of all it is alot more clean aswell
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: OneGrayWolf on March 11, 2008, 03:58:53 PM
lolz, yeah. I use paper, then write ALL over it XD (im gonna scan a pic of one of meh pages to show u l8r, im at school XD)

I put it on the computer later though with the edits =3
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: Dr. Strange on March 11, 2008, 10:37:39 PM
Cool. I hate some of my poetry..
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: OneGrayWolf on March 17, 2008, 04:16:46 PM
meep! why u say that!? they are very pretty  :snicker: :sparkle:
Title: Re: Subject Unknown (to be renamed later)
Post by: Dr. Strange on March 17, 2008, 05:59:06 PM
And most of my work >.<