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Title: Little Taco's Poetry :p
Post by: Taco <3 on April 07, 2011, 06:12:35 PM
Let me know wat yew think.....

             To be in a world
             But not in a life
             Forgetting one's sorrow
             And giving one strife
             With pain and anguish
             A voice stays unheard
             The people walk around
             Not saying a word
             The burns, cuts, and bruises disregarded
              Supposed loved ones burn you to the ground
             Are you supposed to build yourself back up?
             Or wait to be found
             As I lay here on this tear-covered ground
             I wonder if this life will ever be found.
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Post by: Ares the Ram on April 07, 2011, 06:21:53 PM
*snaps fingers* Kinda describes my life right now. :(
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Post by: Taco <3 on April 07, 2011, 07:00:05 PM
rawr...i kinda wrote that off the top of mii head...
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Post by: serpington on April 07, 2011, 09:47:03 PM
nice. a little spelling mistake but really good otherwise. do you have more your willing to share?
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Post by: Taco <3 on April 07, 2011, 10:32:38 PM
This Life
I dont know why I laugh
I dont know why I cry
All I know is I cant tell whats inside
I think I know whats going on
But I guess life proved me wrong
I want to know so I can be with my King
My life my love my everything
I know the way its long and hard
But I can make it through this life
With my Father by my side.

Post Merge: April 07, 2011, 10:37:51 PM
Realization
There are things going on around us
That alot don't know

Some of us may hate this life
Others may love it
But what they don't realize is there are...

People dying
Lots of crying
Race against race
Abuse to living things
Love is breaking Earth is shaking coming to an end
But love can save the day
Not of spouses but of the heart
You must trust yourself before you can live
To live is to understand your boundaries.
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Post by: CormacCoyotecraft on April 08, 2011, 03:51:39 AM
I like how you control the pace of the poems (especially the third one you posted) by breaking up the stanzas. Have you ever thought about utilizing punctiation to achieve this effect as well?
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Post by: Taco <3 on April 08, 2011, 01:30:53 PM
i just dont put puncuation all the time
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Post by: Mathais on April 13, 2011, 10:06:04 PM
I definitely like! Im glad you decided to put this up here
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Post by: Taco <3 on April 13, 2011, 10:18:25 PM
rawr....i wrote a song...but i dont think yewd like it
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Post by: Mathais on April 13, 2011, 10:33:58 PM
I think that you dont know that until I see it ^^
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Post by: Egan on April 14, 2011, 10:19:47 PM
Yeah little taco, just post it! I'm sure everyone will love it.
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Post by: Taco <3 on May 10, 2011, 03:00:27 PM
I'm in a world of lust and desire, love and obsession, ice and fire,
Giving your heart is as easy as breathing,
No matter how hard it brings you down in the end,
You trust my heart more than I trust my own life,
I love with my entire heart, not just parts,
But in any words to describe my painI will live for you, die for you,
I will leave everything I know just to be with you.
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Post by: Taco <3 on May 25, 2011, 05:55:49 PM
If I hold up this drink, will I say it's my last
If I go with you, will you forgive my past
I can't believe you would live to love me
But, please don't assume you can fix me

I'm not just some car you can fix up... ~Bella Swan
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Post by: Aoren Deringer on May 29, 2011, 04:32:13 AM
Taco... Im in shock, your really good!
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Post by: Taco <3 on May 30, 2011, 01:43:04 AM
thanks.......i don't really try but thanks anyways.......i may put some more up later
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Post by: Aoren Deringer on May 30, 2011, 04:06:14 AM
You dont have to try to be good.
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Post by: Taco <3 on June 01, 2011, 02:10:44 PM
I see colors
Red and Blue
But could it be?
That the colors
I see are insanely
black and twisted....

Post Merge: June 01, 2011, 06:59:34 PM
Life is more than enough to bear
Why must we bear another's?
When a friend calls us up
We want to help
But can't because of our own clouded minds.
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Post by: Midnight Madness on June 01, 2011, 10:03:42 PM
Impressive poetry; for sure. I like your style!
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Post by: Døvu on June 16, 2011, 11:43:47 PM
i love it, great work man!
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Post by: Taco <3 on June 16, 2011, 11:50:04 PM
I is a girl T_T......but thanks :3
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Post by: Døvu on June 16, 2011, 11:53:53 PM
oh im sorry. please excuse me. I knew I should have double checked your gender symbol ><

thats laziness for you.
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Post by: Taco <3 on June 16, 2011, 11:57:36 PM
lol is all good
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Post by: Døvu on June 16, 2011, 11:58:52 PM
i feel bad that was rude of me :l

but really I like your work :D
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Post by: Kyaine on June 20, 2011, 01:01:48 AM
Taco you got talent, nice poems i so gotta learn how to be that good. ^_^
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Post by: Taco <3 on August 18, 2011, 06:32:19 PM
What are those words to you, empty glass?
I guess so because you used that to cut my heart.
I've loved you forever, I have pain and tears to prove,
These things are like razor blades,
But your words are sharper,
I just have one request,
Please stop playing with my heart,
I can't take it anymore,
I don't know whether to believe we're over or not.
 
"Because, it doesn't make sense for you to love me." ~Bella, New Moon: Twilight Saga
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Post by: Mathais on August 25, 2011, 11:09:47 PM
It feels good, as I haven't read a good taco poem this whole summer!
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Post by: Døvu on September 05, 2011, 05:00:10 AM
love it taco! keep em commin :D!!!!
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Post by: Taco <3 on September 22, 2011, 10:56:39 PM
Covering my face with everything but real
Giving myself another reason to give in to the world around me
Lift this, lose that, get more of this, less of that,
Live  :D Laugh  XP Love :*
Don't let them put you down,
Don't let them run you over,
I am me, I am Taco(or enter your name) ^_^