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Creative Arts and Media => Creative Writing => Topic started by: Moongaze on June 19, 2010, 04:22:00 PM
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I just found a poem I wrote. I read it, and made some quick corrections. I have no idea what it's called, or when I wrote it... But I was looking through my files and I found it randomly, and I feel like sharing it. :D
A sense of substance, the embodiment of structure
A spur of creation an impulse of change in time
A new age has begun unto all
The strain of moral concept to be
Harsh divinity of mind
In spirtual hands lay onto me
The wave of perfection has begun
Striving to capture all perpetual contour
A learning to feel and define purpose
Bound by all, element and conscious
Stepping ever closer to the ethereal world
Dismal sounds cry in the winds
Fading fast into the night
This process is eternal
To learn and to grasp wonder and fear
Vivid in detail, a perpspective through the eyes of the living
The ages expand, the circle has only just begun
Immortal contrast
A celestial premise in form of the primordial entity
They span the wavelength of time and creation
To live, to dream, to learn, to feel
The advent of internally concious beings
They have attained the standard of purity, mind, and perfection
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Edit supreme with mild sauce:
Well, I found more info on this.
Title: Quintessence.
Date written: 07-06-2009, 03:25 AM
Purpose: This was actually going to become a song so... I have some work ahead of me! o.O
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I love the wording, nice poem Moongaze <3
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Thank you very much. It means a lot. :3
I don't mess around with words when I write. This was probably the product of one of my grooves where I can't put an idea to words in minutes. I probably have another one lying around somewhere... After I fix a fatal flaw in this one I'm going back to searching!
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It's very interesting, filled with a rather ethereal idea. Plus the wording is pretty cool, except that i don't like it when people say things in a rather ye olde tone. But that's just me.
Judging by the title, you want other writers to post some stuff?
tell me if I'm right, cus i looked through my stuff and it's really rather... interesting.
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You can post something if you want to. This is more or less a message to check through your computer because you never know what you might find. :3
And I don't think this has a ye olde tone to it. The idea is creation, and everything since the beginning has been ever changing, and as creatures became more intelligent religion emerged. And the religion that is emerging here is a paganistic idea. If you look at "A celestial premise in the form of the primordial entity" it's speaking of something up in the heavens (celestial) and the primordial entity could any one thing, or any multiple thing.
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My computer is brand new. I just got it a week and a half ago so I doubt I'll find much of anything lol.
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Haha, well... It's never start to get started on stuff you'll forget about until much later! XD