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Creative Arts and Media => Creative Writing => Topic started by: Ninjalion on May 11, 2010, 11:33:36 PM

Title: Howl To The Moon
Post by: Ninjalion on May 11, 2010, 11:33:36 PM

Howl to the wind
Howl to the moon
Howl to heaven
Howl To God
Howl to the up
Howl to your love
someone loves you
someone is watching you
someone fights for you
while you give back
He is happy you are family
love will outlast our enemies
Time will prove the lies from the truth
Time will prove the love from the hate
You and I know our fate
To be together not to late.
Howl to the moon, bright times comes soon.

(Written in late summer 09)

Title: Re: Howl To The Moon
Post by: Asia Kali Yusufzai on May 12, 2010, 11:14:32 AM

Well its very clean, neat, no major mistakes to speak of. The only problem is that it feels like a list. Not like a poetic list, but just a normal list. It flows in the same way that something in alphabetical order would read. It's because the rhythm isn't uniform, its choppy and disorderly for no discernable reason.

So, it's clean, just poetically dysfunctional